Talk:Personal (Men of Vizion album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 06:28, 5 January 2013 (UTC)

Review

 * Lead
 * "with some noting similarities" with some isa bit too vague, I guess that it's the wording, tweak it a bit.


 * Release
 * "Originally set to be released on May 14, 1996, Personal was released" redundancy of "released"
 * I see that "weeks" is used repetitively, try to switch some of the to "issue". Example: "to re-enter at the same position for the week ending on July 20." --> "to re-enter at the same position on the chart issued on July 20."
 * "being moving back"?
 * "exited" is used too much.
 * "tying in with the song's lyric play on reversed gender roles" what does this exactly mean?


 * Critical
 * Try to avoid farmquotting


 * Tracklisting
 * Why not using the template? (it is not mandatory ofc)


 * Personnel and Credits and personnel
 * Why two different sections?

— ΛΧΣ  21  06:37, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
 * References
 * All good here.


 * I believe I've fixed all the issues brought forth. As for the track listing, I don't own the album, and I couldn't find scans online for the credits, so I just left it as is. I will, however, put it into the template later. — Statυs  ( talk,  contribs ) 06:57, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Fair enough. Passing. — ΛΧΣ  21  07:04, 5 January 2013 (UTC)