Talk:Personal relationships of Michael Jackson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Regards, SunCreator (talk) 00:00, 10 March 2010 (UTC)

Reviewing this version of the article. Regards, SunCreator (talk) 00:00, 10 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Read previous peer review.

Well-written: (minor issues) Pass
 * Spelling: deaceased to deceased. longterm to long-term. frolicing to frolicking. Jackon to Jackson. emphazising to emphasizing
 * ✅  Pyrrhus  16 ''' 10:28, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
 * longterm?  Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:02, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Grammar: 'became addicted to prescribed pain medication.'
 * ✅ I re-worded the sentence to "became addicted to prescription medication." Crystal Clear x3 [talk] 09:32, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Misc: dependent = addicted? judge to Judge. Lead linking done again in body.
 * ✅ Crystal Clear x3 [talk] 09:32, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
 * addicted edit introduced grammatical error and I noted it because it's duplicated in the text several times. see below
 * Un-linking of items in lead only partly done. Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:02, 10 March 2010 (UTC)

Factually accurate and verifiable: Pass
 * 'more charities than any other musician' - usatoday source says 'most charities supported by a pop star'
 * ✅ Crystal Clear x3 [talk] 09:09, 10 March 2010 (UTC)

Broad in its coverage:Pass

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias.: Pass
 * Charities claim above. Final image.
 * ✅ Fixed the charity involvement (above) and I removed the photo of the Jackson supporter in the final section of the article (I presumed you were referring to that photo). Crystal Clear x3 [talk] 09:12, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Yes, the photos slogan, "Jackson is Innocent" was not neutral.
 * Charity claim seems undue in sentence. Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:02, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
 * The article has this re-occuring thing about painkillers/medication etc. It's doesn't seem to have relevance to 'Personal relationships', so I'm going to edit review those bits. Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:39, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
 * LEAD:Presley supported Jackson as he became dependent on pain medication, eventually getting him to enter drug rehabilitation.
 * Lisa Marie:Fuelled by her past addictions and the death of her father, Presley supported Jackson as he became addicted on painkillers
 * Divorce(Lisa Marie):She had supported him as he faced allegations and became dependent on pain medication.
 * Debbie Rowe:Like Jackson's first wife, Rowe supported the entertainer as he was accused of child sexual abuse and became addicted to prescription medication.
 * Removed text in Debbie Rowe section. Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:47, 10 March 2010 (UTC)

Illustrated, if possible, by images:Pass
 * File:Michael_Jackson_1988.jpg - checked
 * File:JosephJackson2007(cropped).jpg - checked
 * File:Lisa Marie Presley at car race.jpg - checked
 * File:MichaelJacksonDebbieRowe1.jpg - checked
 * File:Michael_Jackson3_2006_(cropped_version).jpg - checked

Passing the nomination
All things considered I think it's now a Good Article. Congratulations. Regards, SunCreator (talk) 12:52, 10 March 2010 (UTC)