Talk:Peruchazhi/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:52, 3 March 2016 (UTC)

Will do this soon. JAG UAR   14:52, 3 March 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * "The film originally written in Tamil" - Originally written in Tamil, the film


 * The middle two paragraphs in the lead definitely need to be merged into one


 * "The film is about how Jagannathan a young politician from India" - how about The film revolves around Jagannathan, a young politician from India and his transition to chief political adviser or something like that. The sentence has no breaks and is very choppy


 * United States is linked twice in lead


 * "Sunny is forced to consult a third person's advise and calls Francis Kunjappan" - sounds like an actual third person here. How about Sunny is forced to consult advice from a third person and calls Francis Kunjappa


 * "US" is linked twice in the Plot. The first instance of "US" should be changed to just "United States", and the second "US" delinked


 * "They gives a message to Sunny" - give


 * " but is not revealed that from where he got it" - I don't get this. Is it meant to be like but it is not revealed where he got it?
 * This means, it is not revealed on that scene, it is later shown on climax scene when, Jagannathan calls Sunny and reveals backstage dramas which occurred last night.


 * "Meanwhile, Jagannathan and his pals returns to India" - informal. Use 'friends'


 * "About the unique title, "The term Peruchazhi" - a colon is needed instead of a comma


 * Europe is linked twice in the Release section. Does it even need to be linked?


 * " in google play store in September 2014" - needs capitalisation


 * "which the makers claims to be the first of its kind marketing method" - choppy. How about in which the film's makers claim to be the first of its kind in marketing


 * The first paragraph in Soundtrack is unsourced

There are some prose issues and some confusing sentences, but once they're all addressed this could have a chance at meeting the criteria. JAG UAR   19:10, 3 March 2016 (UTC)

Comments from Kailash
There are just some of the issues I cannot let the GA review overlook. More will come soon. Kailash29792 (talk) 11:08, 4 March 2016 (UTC)
 * The filming and marketing sections may be split if possible.
 * The refs need great cleanup.
 * There can be more categories.
 * "The Oscar nominee Bombay Jayashri had sung a song" - How relevant is that in "Casting"? Besides, the fact that she is an Oscar nominee should removed per WP:PUFFERY.
 * All sources' authors must be in "Last name, first name" format. Some sources lack access date.

Close - not listed
Kailash's comments haven't been addressed, and I think this is far off from meeting the criteria. I was very lenient on Bangalore Days, and I can't afford to do that again. Can you renominate it when it meets the criteria? JAG UAR   17:03, 7 March 2016 (UTC)