Talk:Pete Conrad/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CycloneIsaac (talk · contribs) 00:51, 19 February 2018 (UTC)

Reviewing later.&mdash; CycloneIsaac ( Talk ) 00:51, 19 February 2018 (UTC)


 * 92% for the copyvio detector, but seemed like the site copied from Wikipedia.
 * The lead should mention a bit about his post-NASA career.
 * Expanded a significant amount  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * "From the beginning, Pete Conrad was clearly a bright, intelligent boy, but he continually struggled with his schoolwork." Borderline MOS:PUFF?
 * Reworded a little, do not think I can get rid of the words specifically without taking away the meaning of the sentence (that he was considered smart but did poorly in school).  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * Link center in the article.
 * Done  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * "He excelled in Navy flight school, and he served for several years as an aircraft carrier-based fighter pilot in the Navy. Conrad also served as a flight instructor in Navy flight schools along the Gulf of Mexico."
 * Cited  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * Two links for Gordon Cooper in one section is a bit much.
 * Done  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * "Both Pete and Jane remarried." and "Conrad met Nancy Crane, a Denver divorcee, through mutual friends. Conrad and Crane married in 1990." should be merged.
 * Any more info on Jane's remarriage?
 * Reference 2 could be expanded to add ISBN, date published, etc.
 * Done  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * Reference 6 needs to be in the same format as others.
 * Sorry, I do not understand?  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * Okay, done.  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * The reference isn't using a citation template unlike the others. You should change it for consistency. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  06:28, 26 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Reference 28 needs an access-date.
 * Done  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * Are there more sources that could back up References 29-32? Citing IMDb on its own is not reliable.
 * Hm, in this instance they fall under 'disputed uses' (though I do not see any links to discussions and if it will always be disputed..). I can make an effort to find other sources, if you want.  Kees08  (Talk)  
 * Have you considered putting pictures in a image gallery? The photos in the NASA career section are stacking quite a bit.
 * Spread them around a bit.  Kees08  (Talk)  

Should be it for now. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  04:50, 23 February 2018 (UTC)