Talk:Peter Hall (RNZAF officer)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 16:06, 19 September 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:06, 19 September 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

 * Medal bar is duplicated in the lede
 * Fixed. Zawed (talk) 09:57, 29 September 2023 (UTC)


 * Article is stable
 * File:Peter Hall, RNZAF (cropped).jpg needs USPD
 * Added. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)


 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikey

Lede and infobox

 * Main text does not say he died in Cumbria
 * Initially removed, then re-added when I found a source for it. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)


 * Hall spent about half his service in 140 Sqn, I think it appropriate to add it in the infobox
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

Main text

 * Clergyman, not clergy man
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)


 * Where was 140 Squadron based?
 * My print sources for RAF squadrons only cover the fighter units so I have added a little bit from an online source. It doesn't have much. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)


 * Link sorties (and where were they?)
 * Linked. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)


 * "Hall and his navigator were credited"
 * Fixed. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)


 * "but also carrying out"
 * Fixed. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)


 * "His success was accidental" any more details available? How does one accidentally shoot down an aircraft?
 * Have added a little more on this. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)


 * "award of a Bar" no need to capitalise
 * I'm not sure on this. The template for postnominals captalises it and I think I have been pinged on another article for rendering it as lower case. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)