Talk:Peter Shurman

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This article has been put together really haphazardly.

With Peter now running for a seat in the legislature is it possible someone could clean this up? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 206.248.190.87 (talk) 03:27, August 30, 2007 (UTC)

References!
First off, just wondering why there are so few references for this article?

undertaking an assignment to grow a minor Toronto paging company, into one of the area's largest and most important operators in only eighteen months

This is extremely vague.

Political Career: The article states that Shurman's election was due to the faith-based funding policy, which is correct, however it is incorrect to write that it was due to his support of it. Shurman never supported the faith-based policy, he just happened to be running in the right party at the right time (under John Tory) in the right riding (Thornhill). And here is a reference: http://yorkregion.com/News/Thornhill/article/53663

Anyway this article may be doing more harm than good right now, I hope a dedicated Wiki-er will clean it up. I really appreciate the work you guys do.

theripper - 99.237.215.17 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 99.237.215.17 (talk) 00:33, 22 November 2007 (UTC)

Redundant sentences that were redundant
My favourite poorly written sentence was in the "Chanuka Broadcast" section, which said "In 2005, Shurman made a speciah Chanuka special on the radio about Chanuka..." That's got to be the one of the worst sentences in Wiki-history. Anyways I've cleaned up that sentence at least. Had to mention it here for posterity though. Oh, and the subtitle said "Brodcast". —Preceding unsigned comment added by 99.227.76.96 (talk) 04:01, 9 July 2008 (UTC)