Talk:Phidippus clarus

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 15 September 2020 and 17 December 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Ahamed01.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 02:19, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Student Comments and Questions
''Hello! I am peer reviewing your article and just had some clarifying questions about your information that I think could help your article. I did change quite a bit of the layout, so that it matched that of the article format layout given so some information has been rearranged. I also proofread and fixed any grammatical errors I found.Katherine.handley (talk) 21:43, 1 December 2020 (UTC) Why is the word "take" used throughout the article when discussing hunting prey? I might use words such as: consume, eat,steal, kill.

When mentioning information within the lead it should not necessarily be completely copied again within the sections, it should be a summary, if it can not be summarized or shortened I might not mention it in the lead. Some information just feels redundant. I might also remove/delete the information under Taxanomy as you already mention all of this information in the lead and it is sufficient and does not need to be stated again.

“ When the courtship display of wolf spider Schizocosa ocreata combines visual signals with vibrations, P. clarus responds to its wolf spider prey more quickly than when the wolf spider presents only one of the types of signal” This wording is a little unclear, maybe provide more information or reword I just wasn't sure what this sentence was trying to inform me about.

When discussing vibration of "surfaces" did you mean surface of the web? Plants? ground? all surfaces? I might be a little more specific just to give a better visual as to what you are talking about.

Under Male/Male interactions/fighitng you mention the importance of size, but never explicitly state that the largest males have the best outcome, might just add a sentence or 2 about this to clarify.

When bringing up female fighting you discuss that it is more physical, do you have any explanation as to why these females are fighting? what are they fighting for? Maybe elaborate more

Within the segment about biocontrol you mention cannibalism within the spider but this is not mentioned anywhere else in the article is this common within this spider? or was this a speculation? I might write more about this if it is prevalent within the species. I also think that the biocontrol sections ends a little abruptly. I might add another concluding sentence about why we would want to utilize these motives.

If you have any questions/confusions/need any clarifications let me know! Katherine.handley (talk) 21:43, 1 December 2020 (UTC)

Hello! This article is really great – the pictures provide a great visual aspect to the page. I removed a red link in the lead and added a map of where the spider can be found and in the parasites section. The prose is well-written and succinct. Akwan826 (talk) 17:48, 3 December 2020 (UTC)

Hello! I liked your article and think it was well written. A few sections were a little short, and I would have love to read a bit more. I added a couple sentences to your description and reproduction sections to help flesh them out a bit. Shaynarosenbloom (talk) — Preceding undated comment added 04:56, 4 December 2020 (UTC)