Talk:Phil Harvey (band manager)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: FuzzyMagma (talk · contribs) 17:54, 12 September 2023 (UTC)

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * see comments below
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * half of the references are not acceptable, see details below
 * B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * did not check due to quick fail
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * excessive use of quotation and additional large pink quotation!
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * did not check due to quick fail
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * did not check due to quick fail
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * did not check due to quick fail
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall: some of the comments from previous review was not address, e.g., "Twitter: The couple have three children " + the article is build on primary sources + there is also excessive use of quotation that does not serve any purpose = quick fail under 1 and 3
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall: some of the comments from previous review was not address, e.g., "Twitter: The couple have three children " + the article is build on primary sources + there is also excessive use of quotation that does not serve any purpose = quick fail under 1 and 3
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Overall: some of the comments from previous review was not address, e.g., "Twitter: The couple have three children " + the article is build on primary sources + there is also excessive use of quotation that does not serve any purpose = quick fail under 1 and 3
 * Pass or Fail:

lead

 * degree at the University of Melbourne during this period

Early life

 * unnecessary quotes, e.g., the line-up "never overlapped"

Management

 * excessive quotes that mount to copyvio
 * "manager again, but now assisted by", remove now

Creative direction

 * excessive unnecessary quotes that mount to copyvio, e.g., He would "pop his head in the studio to give his opinion" occasionally,

Personal life

 * "the manager travelled around South America", the manager is Harvey right? then write Harvey

Discography

 * source?