Talk:Philip Bourne

Excessive citations
A few suggestions for this page: the last statement in the Career section is followed by a zillion citations. As outlined on the page Citation overkill there should be at most three citations there. Consider choosing a couple that are the most reliable and say the statement the best. You can then delete the others or if you feel a need to include those sources just add material to the article from them, and in that way you can keep them. Another problem I see with the article is that for better readability citations aught to go after commas, although it is better to put them all after the period at the end of the sentence. Also the Career section is pretty dense and I have a hard time reading it, perhaps due all the short sentences, wikilinks, and external links. Speaking of which, external links belong in the External Links section at the end of the article, not in the body, according to External links. I'm not trying to blast the article or anything, I'm just trying to note down what I see as problems with it, in the hopes that someone will fix it so that its a good read for everyone. Thanks. Jessemv (talk) 06:12, 23 October 2011 (UTC)