Talk:Philip Slier/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:07, 14 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not really convinced you need to link Dutch or Jewish here.
 * Unlinked.


 * "as an onderduiker" I think you need to translate this rather than make us click away to see what that means.
 * Explained.


 * "shifted places" odd way of putting it, do you mean "he moved around"?
 * He frequently changed his lodgings. I have used "moved to different hiding locations" instead.


 * "to a couple of" loose, was it two?
 * I have changed it to "to two". Wouldn't "to two" sound a little off though? — The Most Comfortable Chair 17:55, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "at the Sobibor extermination camp just" probably worth noting this was in Poland.
 * Noted.


 * "discovered by a foreman over" is the profession important here without the context?
 * Good point. Removed.


 * "three story" hyphenate.
 * Done.


 * "They succeeded and..." don't think you need this, merge the subsequent portion with the previous sentence.
 * Merged.


 * You have "labourer" but "labor camp". ENGVAR?
 * Changed to "labour".


 * "German Schutzstaffel SS prisoner" italics consistency please. And full stop on this caption.
 * Done.


 * "resistance" is there a good link for this?
 * Yes, Resistance during World War II.


 * "punishment barrack" what is that?
 * They were similar to prison cells — Auschwitz concentration camp has images. I have linked it to Barracks.


 * "There were 2,020 prisoners shipped to Sobibor on his train" merge that 2020 into the previous sentence.
 * Merged.


 * "hours.[14][19][19]" repeated ref.
 * Removed.


 * "He found 86 letters, a postcard, and a telegram" you've said these numbers already.
 * Removed.


 * "p. 30, 31." -> "pp. 30, 31"
 * Done.


 * Same for p. 11, 25.
 * Done.

Very sad reading. But a decent article and not much to address here, so on hold for now. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 16:54, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * It is very sad indeed. Thank you for your fine review . I believe I have addressed all your points. Best. — The Most Comfortable Chair 17:55, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Okay, I've re-read and am satisfied this is at GA level now. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 09:24, 17 March 2021 (UTC)