Talk:Pierroth Jr./GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:58, 25 September 2019 (UTC)

Will be happy to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 19:58, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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Lead

 * "best known under the ring name Pierroth Jr." - try to avoid using the term "best known"
 * Mexican and Spanish need to be delinked per MOS:OVERLINK
 * "using the name Pierroth Jr. but lost his mask as a result of losing a match to La Parka in 1998." - better; He to avoid WP:EDITORIALIZING
 * "leader of a faction of pro-Puerto Rican wrestlers in CMLL known as Los Boricuas, despite being born in Mexico." - would be better worded as notwithstanding him being born in Mexico to avoid the use of the editoralising word "despite" per the MOS standard above
 * "After having suffered a stroke in November 2008" - suffering a stroke
 * "and International Wrestling Revolution Group (IWRG) as well as making several tours with the Puerto Rico-based World Wrestling Council (WWC)." - This is better gramatically and International Wrestling Revolution Group (IWRG). He also undertook several tours with the Puerto Rico-based World Wrestling Council (WWC).

Professional wrestling career

 * "inspired by the wrestler Pierrot who was popular in Arena Isabel in the 1950s and 1960s despite not being related in any way - to avoid editoralizing, how about wording the text in bold to in the 1950s and 1960s; the two are unrelated.
 * "The team with El Judio later let to a storyline feud" - typo; led

Empresa Mexicana de Lucha Libre / Consejo Mundial de Luch Libre (1985–1995)

 * "splitting his time between working at Arena Isabel and working for EMLL in Mexico City." - better and more concise: diving his career to Arena Isabel and EMLL in Mexico City.
 * "Pierroth Jr. became a two-time Mexican National Light Heavyweight Champion on January 12, 1990 as he defeated Mogur to win the title." - with a victory over Mogur to win the title.
 * "Pierroth Jr. began teaming with Bestia Salvaje on a regular basis in late 1989/early 1990" - Do you mean from late 1989 to early 1990 or around around late 1989 to early 1990?
 * "Their reign lasted 287 until they were defeated by Ángel Azteca" - I believe the missing word in this sentence is days after the number "287"
 * "Afterwards he was put together with Jaque Mate and Masakre to for a trio called" - the sentence should be worded as Afterward he was put together Jaque Mate and Masakre to form a trio called
 * "after which Los Intocables was broken up." - needs to be cited to a reliable source
 * "On April 2, 1993, Dr. Wagner Jr. ended the reign by defeating Pierroth Jr." - would be better as Pierroth Jr.'s reign was ended by Dr. Wagner Jr.

Asistencia Asesoría y Administración / World Wrestling Federation (1995–1997)

 * "In the summer of 1996 Pierroth Jr. won" - try not to word the text in bold in this way per MOS:SEASON
 * "The following month he teamed up with" - just teamed would suffice
 * "(WWF; now known as WWE)" - now called
 * "The duo participated in the 1997 Royal Rumble match but were eliminated without any storylines." - better and more neutral and were eliminated without a storyline.

International Wrestling Revolution Group / World Wrestling Council (1997-1999)

 * "based on Naucalpan, Mexico State." - grammatically correct: based in
 * "He became the first ever holder of the IWRG Intercontinental Heavyweight Championship" - more formal: inaugural
 * "On July 20, 1998 Pierroth Jr. lost a Lucha de Apuestas match to long time rival La Parka, and was forced to remove his black and yellow mask and reveal his real name," - the text in bold should begin a new sentence and started with He was required
 * "but was still working under a mask in Puerto Rico," - more neutral word he was still working

Los Boricuas (1999–2003)

 * "He began teaming up with Gran Markus Jr. who also adopted the "Boricua" loyalty." - a little better He began teaming with Gran Markus Jr., who also adopted the "Boricua" loyalty.

Retirement

 * "Salgrado was forced to retire from professional wrestling in November 2008" - typo; Salgado
 * "after having suffered a debilitating stroke." - a little more concise: after suffering a
 * "Shows in his hometown of Cuernavaca also paid home and support to Salgado." - I believe it is meant the crowd paid homage to Salgrado
 * Also in the sentence above SuperLuchas does not specially say that the shows were supporting Salgado. - Original Research
 * Which one? The sources state (in order) Función a beneficio de Norberto Salgado - it is right there in the title isn't it that it was a benefit show for him? MPJ-DK (talk) 22:49, 18 October 2019 (UTC)


 * "where he was presented with a plaque and applause as he put the black and yellow mask on" - and received applause

Name confusion

 * "or variations on that name, in professional wrestling." - or variatons of the name in professional wrestling.
 * The fourth and fifth bullet points require a period to end the respective sentences.

Professional wrestling persona

 * "for his long, vitriolic promos both in the ring and back stage." - Is the word promotions meant. If so it should be changed accordingly.
 * "while putting pressure on their legs at the same time." - better: and simultaneously putting pressure on their legs.