Talk:Pilot (Breaking Bad)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 06:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Meta discussion

 * Hello, Some Dude From North Carolina. I will be the one to review this nomination, which I will present shortly. Hopefully, my feedback will be helpful. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 06:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
 * , hey, so I've completed the review and the article is more or less a good article. There are a few minor issues which might need resolving so I'm putting it on hold for the time being. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 13:20, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * , I have looked over the changes and congratulations on getting this article to the status of a good article. I'll be passing it now. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 20:08, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

Assessment
 Comprehension: The article is well written. 

Verifiability: The article is verifiable.

Comprehensiveness: The article is adequate in its comprehensiveness.

Neutrality: The article is neutral.

Stability: The article is adequately stable. Illustration: The article is well illustrated. 



Comments

 * Question about the image caption. It's been a long time since I saw the episode but is the caption accurate? As far as I remember, the trailer implied that he was preparing to confront the police but wasn't he simply preparing his gun to shoot himself? Tayi Arajakate  Talk 06:59, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Well, in the episode, Walter White points his gun towards the sounds of the sirens, questions this decision and attempts to commit suicide, and then points the gun again towards the sirens. I would say that per the timeline of the events, the caption is accurate.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 14:11, 9 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Suggestions:
 * The sentence "Jesse drives back to show his distributor, Krazy-8 but encounters Krazy-8's cousin, Emilio Koyama, who believes Jesse set him up during the drug bust." is a bit awkward. I would suggest either removing "show" or adding "to show the product to his distributor".
 * ✅  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The sentence "However, The Hollywood Reporter revealed that same year that the pilot had in fact been watched by 1.41 million people instead." is a bit awkward as well. For instance the phrase "that same year that the pilot", it should also clarify that it was later in the same year.
 * ✅  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The quotations could be turned down a bit, for instance at the beginning of the section on production. Some of them could be re-worked as sentences narrating what Gilligan says instead of direct quotes.
 * ✅  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The last paragraph is a bit too blue link intensive. Maybe it can be re-worked in a chart format.
 * ✅  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The part referred to in the caption should be included in the plot too.
 * ✅  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The article could talk a bit more about RJ Mitte's casting if that is available and if there is other information available about the production.
 * ✅ Added information on the casting of Aaron Paul and Dean Norris.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Oops, I meant that for the casting for Jesse Pinkman's role, not that of Walter Jr. Since, you have added it anyways, it's done now. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 20:04, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

Tayi Arajakate Talk 13:13, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * All done.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)