Talk:Pilot (Lost)/GA3

GA Review
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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 07:57, 14 January 2012 (UTC)


 * I'll start this review in the next few days.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:57, 14 January 2012 (UTC)
 * I have just read Talk:Pilot (Lost)/GA1 and Talk:Pilot (Lost)/GA2. Those guys are both tougher reviewers than I am, although I am more of a pain. I have not gotten into the article too much, but I personally would highlight the awards in the WP:LEAD.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 08:08, 15 January 2012 (UTC)

GA1 issues

 * The following issues from GA1 remain:
 * 1) Per WP:MOS, citations should follow directly on from punctuation, with no space as has been left in some instances here.
 * 2) WP:WAF recommends no more than 100 words for every 10 minutes of air time with regards to plot summaries - while the airtime of both episodes combined is around the 80-85 minute mark, the plot summary runs to almost 1000 words and should be reduced accordingly. (I count 1001 words as of 1/16/2012)
 * Still 937.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:28, 26 January 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) "Part 1" and "Part 2" should always be written enclosed in "quotes", per stylistic conventions on episode names.
 * 2) Lead section could stand to be clearer - the relevance of the usage of flashbacks to the series is poorly conveyed.
 * 3) "Lord of the Flies-inspired... needs a references--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:40, 16 January 2012 (UTC)

GA2 issues

 * The following issues from GA2 remain:
 * 1) The episodes were directed by J.J. Abrams, and written by Abrams along with Damon Lindelof, based on story by them and Jeffrey Lieber. is also not grammatically sound. Try The episodes were directed by J.J. Abrams, written by Abrams and Damon Lindelof, and based on a story created by Abrams, Lindelof, and Jeffrey Lieber.
 * 2) "Where is she?". should not have a period after a question mark.
 * 3) The "TV Q&A: ‘LOST’—JACK BENDER". Wizard. 2007-03-27. http://www.wizarduniverse.com/television/lost/004036830.cfm. Retrieved 2007-10-03. ref should not be in all caps.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:54, 17 January 2012 (UTC)
 * 4) Check dead links
 * 5) Ref 13 is just a link. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:59, 17 January 2012 (UTC)
 * 6) Is there a reference for the airdate(s)?
 * 7) Does anything cite primarily due to the expense of purchasing, shipping, and dressing the actual decommissioned aircraft body used to represent the wreckage.? Because otherwise, it seems like WP:OR.
 * 8) The series began development in January 2004, when Lloyd Braun, head of ABC at the time, ordered an initial script from Spelling Television based on his concept of a cross between the novel Lord of the Flies, the movie Cast Away, the television series Gilligan's Island, and the popular reality show Survivor. ABC had also premiered a short lived series about plane crash survivors in 1969 called The New People with the opening episode by Rod Serling. Is there anything to reference those statements?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:05, 17 January 2012 (UTC)
 * 9) Images need alt text per the alt text tool.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:09, 17 January 2012 (UTC)
 * I decided to help out whoever nom'd this and I believe I fixed issues from GA1 #1, 2, and 3, and issues from GA2 #1, 2, 3, 4, and 5.--Gen. Quon (talk) 23:53, 25 January 2012 (UTC)

GA 3

 * WP:LEAD
 * In the first sentence you mention part one and part two, but later you mention them as if "Part One" and "Part Two" are official names. Be consistent.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:04, 26 January 2012 (UTC)
 * Casting seems to be by far the largest section, but does not seem to be summarized in the LEAD.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:04, 26 January 2012 (UTC)
 * Could you add one paragraph about the same length as the current two to summarize the plot.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:13, 26 January 2012 (UTC)


 * Plot
 * "claims he is a terrorist" has an ambiguous subject.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:31, 26 January 2012 (UTC)


 * Production
 * You need to eliminate redundant links like Lloyd Braun, Matthew Fox, etc.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:31, 26 January 2012 (UTC)
 * link antipathetic to Antipathy.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:31, 26 January 2012 (UTC)


 * It has come to my attention that the nominator has made no edits in the last two weeks and only 10 edits since January 7. I may fail this due to lack of activity by the end of the week.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:53, 31 January 2012 (UTC)
 * I am failing this now.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:08, 5 February 2012 (UTC)
 * I am failing this now.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:08, 5 February 2012 (UTC)