Talk:Pilot (Veronica Mars)/GA1

GA Review
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Looking pretty good as usual. A few comments: Only a few things to clear up, so I'll put the GAN on hold. You've got a week to make necessary changes so good luck :) — 97198 (talk) 10:47, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * But when her best friend, Lilly Kane (Amanda Seyfried) is murdered - comma after brackets.
 * Fixed.  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:56, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * However, her drink is spiked and she is raped - "however" should rarely begin a sentence; here could do without anyway.
 * Removed.  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:56, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Ironically, Teddy Dunn originally auditioned for Logan, but ended up portraying Duncan Kane - I agree with you here but I think irony is subjective (and thus POV). Completely open to discussion on this, though.
 * I didn't make the connection, but now that you mention it, it probably is a bit POVish. I removed it to be on the safe side.  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:56, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * The audition process for Logan was originally Duncan - huh? Makes it seem as if they were both the same character (or reversed), but that in itself somewhat contradicts the previous statements about the actors auditioning for each others' roles.
 * I don't understand it either, I just made the best I could of the references. I think it means that the audition process for Duncan was Duncan (duh - I'm pointing that one at myself), but that the process for Logan was also Duncan (since Logan was only going to be a guest star). So if you wanted to audition for Logan, you would do the same thing as you would when audtioning for Duncan. Do you see another way that I could write it better in the article?  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:56, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Perhaps "The audition process for Logan was originally Duncan" --> "The original audition process for Logan involved reading Duncan's lines". What do you think? — 97198 (talk) 12:31, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Informalities: "new kid", "bashing".
 * I fixed those. Are there any others I did not pick up?  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:56, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * from the beginning.Kramon wrote - missing a space?
 * Let's pretend that wasn't there. ;)  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:56, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Perhaps link vibraphone (and anything else you feel is necessary) - I'd certainly never heard of one of those!
 * Lol, I haven't either. I also have no idea what compression and filtration are (in terms of music) so I wasn't able to find a proper corresponding Wikipedia page. Could you have a look?  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:56, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Compression and filtration, I do believe, though my musical knowledge doesn't extend too far either ;) — 97198 (talk) 12:31, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Ref 16 uses a different format of retrieval date... but that's just my pedanticy (making up words here).
 * Okay, I can't fix this one. I'm using "cite news", since this ref needs registration, so that I don't need to post a url. However, it automatically changes the dates to that format. Please do tell me I have to change all the rest to correspond with it. :(  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:56, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * No big deal, just my "pedanticy" - don't kill yourself over it if there are more constructive things to be getting on with. — 97198 (talk) 12:31, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Not sure if external links 1 and/or 2 are worthy of inclusion per WP:EL as they're fansites and don't seem to add anything. Your thoughts on that?
 * Removed.  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  11:56, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Cool, I think that covers everything. Anything else?  Corn.u.co.pia /  Disc.us.sion  12:42, 17 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Great. I'll go ahead and pass this; well done! — 97198 (talk) 05:18, 18 November 2008 (UTC)