Talk:Plan and Execution/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 20:08, 6 September 2022 (UTC)

Minor copy changes are all that's needed besides a few other tweaks. 7-day hold to. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 20:23, 6 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I see you've made all the changes. Two last tasks: running IABot again and (I suggest this across the various BCS articles you have) adding alt text to the promo poster. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 04:37, 8 September 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ A person in Georgia (talk) 12:45, 8 September 2022 (UTC)

Lead

 * "Plan and Execution" was met with critical acclaim, particularly for its direction, cinematography, score, and on-screen performances, most notably that of Patrick Fabian as Howard. I feel like this sentence just has too many commas. Maybe removing ", particularly" would help?
 * ✅ A person in Georgia (talk) 21:09, 6 September 2022 (UTC)

Plot

 * An expansion of the abbreviation HHM is merited. I come into this article not having watched this series or Breaking Bad, so I don't know what this means (Howard Hamlin Mediators?).
 * ✅ A person in Georgia (talk) 21:10, 6 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Hyphenate "low-priority"
 * ✅ A person in Georgia (talk) 21:10, 6 September 2022 (UTC)
 * The plot is 312 words, within the length guidelines of MOS:TVPLOT.

Production

 * Fabian had been aware prior to the filming of the sixth season that his character would have an early exit, but only received word of his character's death about two weeks before filming the episode, remarking that the writers characterized the moment as "a hinge that swings the rest of the season open."
 * The first comma is not needed. User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences
 * ✅ A person in Georgia (talk) 21:12, 6 September 2022 (UTC)
 * The period should be after the quotation mark, as you are quoting a sentence fragment. MOS:INOROUT This also occurs in each of the next two sentences.
 * ✅ A person in Georgia (talk) 21:12, 6 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Hyphenate "fifth-season" and "sixth-season" as adjectives
 * ✅ A person in Georgia (talk) 21:12, 6 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Schanuz reiterated that the writers did not plan on having the event of Howard's death as a midseason finale, and maintained that this was a coincidence. Another commas in sentences error; there's also a typo at the start of the sentence.
 * ✅ A person in Georgia (talk) 21:12, 6 September 2022 (UTC)

Reception

 * Comma after "the episode" in sentence 2
 * ✅ A person in Georgia (talk) 21:13, 6 September 2022 (UTC)

Other items

 * Images: The Fabian image is freely licensed; the poster has an appropriate NFUR. I would suggest writing alt text for the poster by using image_alt in the infobox, as the caption alone does not describe the poster.
 * Run IABot again (looks like the newest ref was added after archiving). The Rolling Stone coverage is culture, not politics. There is a tweet, which is used as a primary source for a statement by Schnauz.
 * Earwig flags quotes, quoted reviews, and coincidental formulations ("Better Call Saul and Breaking Bad"). No substantial issues.