Talk:PlayOnline/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 13:13, 12 April 2016 (UTC)

Will do soon JAG  UAR   13:13, 12 April 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * The lead needs to be expanded slightly to meet WP:LEADLENGTH. I would just recommending adding a bit on its reception
 * "The termination date of service for Final Fantasy XI and Playonline" - PlayOnline
 * "Square announced three Final Fantasy games," - needs italicisation
 * "The service was first announced as costing 500 yen" - ¥500
 * "and a 1000 yen monthly user fee" - ¥1000
 * "PlayOnline opened on June 6, 2000 to both Japanese and English speaking players" - speaking players? How about just something like Japan and English-speaking countries or even Japan and Anglophone countries
 * "The sites merchandise included pieces from" - site's
 * "The browser was not a general purpose Internet tool, but only accessed Square content" - delink Square as it already has been linked
 * "exclusively despite Microsofts initial wishes" - Microsoft's
 * " for this reason. it was hoped that content would" - capital 'It'
 * "retailing at 7,140 Yen and had a monthly subscription price of 1,344 Yen" - use the Yen symbols ¥7140 and ¥1344
 * "and a sought 5 million dollar settlement" - $5 million
 * No dead links
 * No dab links

Pretty cool to think that an online service for the PS2 shut down last month! On hold until all are addressed. JAG UAR   13:22, 12 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Much better! Thanks for the speedy fixes. Promoted.  JAG  UAR   14:10, 12 April 2016 (UTC)