Talk:Police brutality against Indigenous Canadians

Wiki Education assignment: Poverty, Justice, and Human Capabilities, Section 1
— Assignment last updated by NP824 (talk) 03:35, 26 October 2022 (UTC)

Wikipedia Assignment Feedback
·Hi Skye! I really enjoyed reading your article and learning about police brutality against Indigenous Canadians. I was really impressed with how cohesive and well-done your page was. You did a good job drawing from a variety of sources (academic journals, new sources, government documents) and citing these sources appropriately. Additionally, I was impressed with how well you were able to incorporate research and statistics into your writing, while still creating digestible content that is Wikipedia user-friendly. One potential area of improvement might be increasing source variety—some sections only had one or two main sources. Adding more sources in these sections would increase the credibility of your content. Another thing you could do to improve your article adds more graphics, like photos, graphs, or charts. This would enhance the overall presentation of your page. Overall, you did an amazing job and I am excited to see your final page!Sam7688 (talk) 01:28, 27 October 2022 (UTC)

Peer Review Assignment
Hey Skye! Lovely work. This article is a very important topic and I admire your ambitions to write a new article. The lead is very direct, readable, and organized sensibly. I really was impressed by how concisely you were able to tackle a topic such as Police brutality against Indigenous Canadians and how much you were able to write considering this sensitive topic is covered-up and under researched. Your writing was detailed and clear and never redundant. In terms of changes, as it affects neutrality and scholarly backing, I would suggest a reduction in how many new articles you use as sources or instead finding scholarly articles in relation to Indigenous Canadians or the police system in Canada (as I know finding ones specifically related to your article is difficult) to balance out your non-scholarly articles. Expanding on causes and detailing more about the police system and perspectives would do well to improve the neutrality of your piece. Then there is also a need for illustrations. Still, great job! I cannot wait to see the final product. EEmenike (talk) 01:35, 27 October 2022 (UTC)