Talk:Popol Out West/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Curly Turkey (talk · contribs) 07:06, 19 December 2013 (UTC)

I'll do this. Curly Turkey (gobble) 07:06, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Much appreciated Curly! Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:33, 19 December 2013 (UTC)

General

 * I'm not familiar with the work, but it does give the impression of comprehensiveness.
 * I'm confident that it is as comprehensive as it can be using English-language sources. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:33, 19 December 2013 (UTC)

Lead

 * : the "comic book" is an American format.
 * How about "comic" as an alternative here ? I've made the change but if you think that there is a better term, let me know. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:33, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : "anthropomorphic"
 * Good point. Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:33, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : "Virginia" or "Virginie"?
 * In the original French, it is Virginie, but was translated as Virginia by Michael Turner and Leslie Lonsdale-Cooper for the 1960s English language publication. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:33, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : "contains"
 * Good point. Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:33, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : there's nothing being contrasted here, so drop the "but"; also, change "would be" to "was"
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:33, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : the "then" is superfluous
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:33, 19 December 2013 (UTC)

Synopsis

 * : "anthropomorphic"
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:59, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : "their" to "the Bunnokees"
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:59, 19 December 2013 (UTC)

History

 * : quotes around the title translation
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : pretty wordy—"on Thursdays" or something would do
 * I've changed the text to "16 weekly installments. The fact that it came out on a Thursday is pretty superfluous imo. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : "then" is unnecessary
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : "it was serialised" is sufficient
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : translation quotes
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : German occupation of Belgium during World War II is a better link
 * I've added the new link and retained the old one. You never know, there might be some readers who don't know what the Second World War was. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : "would be" to "was"
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : "Casterman republished it in 1968"
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 19 December 2013 (UTC)

Critical analysis

 * : I think you need a comma after "children"
 * Agreed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:10, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : "Führer"
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:10, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : "at the time" is superfluous
 * Removed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:10, 19 December 2013 (UTC)

Refs

 * Refs #5, 13, & 17 have Harv errors.
 * I've sorted these three errors. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:34, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * : not according to the Fantagraphics web site.  The source you use is from 2012, so it couldn't possibly be relied on to say the book was definitely released.  Since the announcement Kim Thompson, the translator, has died.  I suspect that's why "This title has been postponed indefinitely."
 * Thank you for bringing this to my attention; I have added the link that you posted and changed the prose in the article accordingly. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:34, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * I'm also adding archived versions of these links, lest they go dead at some point. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:38, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * this is either WP:OR or WP:SYNTHESIS—the source doesn't actually say anything about Thompson's death. Curly Turkey (gobble) 23:10, 19 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Maybe something along the lines of "A new English edition, translated by Kim Thompson, was due to be published by Fantagraphics in 2013 under the title of Peppy and Virginny in Lapinoland. It has since been indefinitely postponed." Curly Turkey (gobble) 06:58, 20 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Good point; I've made the change that you have suggested. Midnightblueowl (talk) 12:57, 20 December 2013 (UTC)
 * SOURCES: I can't access most of the refs, but nothing comes across as suspicious. Curly Turkey (gobble) 06:58, 20 December 2013 (UTC)

Images

 * Only one image, properly tagged for Fair Use.

———Curly Turkey (gobble) 07:33, 19 December 2013 (UTC)

Pass. This looks like a Good Article to me.

One last comment—: personally, I'd drop the French title here, as the strip is only mentioned in passing. Nothing "incorrect" about it, but from a reader's perspective it doesn't really add anything of substance, but it does drag down the flow of the prose. Curly Turkey (gobble) 20:36, 20 December 2013 (UTC)