Talk:Porbeagle/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ucucha 15:45, 25 February 2010 (UTC)

Reading the article now... Ucucha 15:45, 25 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Etymology. The OED gives a more nuanced account of its etymology, which is probably more accurate. I can e-mail you the piece if you like.
 * That'd be helpful. Thanks.
 * Please e-mail me (Special:Emailuser/Ucucha) and I'll reply with the piece.
 * Can you provide the full citation for the passage? -- Yzx (talk) 21:47, 25 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Something like this:


 * "porbeagle". Oxford English Dictionary (subscription required). Oxford University Press, draft revision June 2008. Retrieved February 25, 2010.
 * Ucucha 21:54, 25 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Info added; I've preserved the two existing proposed etymologies as they're the most common ones I've encountered, even if inaccurate. -- Yzx (talk) 22:10, 25 February 2010 (UTC)


 * What is the age of the Chilean fossils (in connection with the colonization of the Southern Hemisphere)?
 * Split up the sites by their ages; the age of the Chilean fossils may be consistent with the ice age colonization theory, but the paleobiogeography of this genus is not yet concretely understood


 * "In the eastern North Pacific," - they are not supposed to be there, are they?
 * Fixed


 * "The porbeagle may attain a length of 3.7 m, though this is uncertain and a more typical length is 2.5 m." - perhaps expand a little on what the doubtful 3.7 m record is based on.
 * Added a bit; size records, particularly older ones, for both Lamna species tend to suffer from misidentifications


 * "The dissected reproductive system of an adult male shark, with parts labeled|The  dissected reproductive system of an adult female shark, with parts  labeled" (alt text). This is not adequate alt text; it should describe the images rather than merely duplicate the caption (alt text is not a GA criterion, but if you include it, you'd as well make it as good as possible).
 * Expanded

Ucucha 16:21, 25 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Let me know of further issues. -- Yzx (talk) 21:17, 25 February 2010 (UTC)
 * As in the previous article of yours I reviewed, there may be a few issues with unexplained jargon. Perhaps you can have a look through the article, and otherwise I'll list some. Ucucha 21:25, 25 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Added some parenthetical terms. -- Yzx (talk) 22:10, 25 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Couple more unexplained terms in lead: peduncle, aplacental viviparous, oophagous (unexplained technical terms should be avoided especially in the lead, as it serves as a general introduction). Elsewhere: parturition.
 * Rephrased some


 * "The porbeagle has four rete mirabile systems: the orbital retia accessing its brain and eyes, the lateral cutaneous retia accessing its swimming muscles, the suprahepatic rete accessing its viscera, and the kidney rete." - that sounds like there are five, not four.
 * How so?
 * One to the brain and eyes, one to the viscera, one to the kidney, at least two lateral ones. Ucucha 22:16, 26 February 2010 (UTC)
 * In the sources I've read, the lateral retia has been considered a single system although they're paired, maybe because they're the same type. I can remove the number. -- Yzx (talk) 22:24, 26 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I thought that might be the explanation, but think the current text is clearer anyway. Ucucha 22:28, 26 February 2010 (UTC)


 * "The porbeagle's capacity for elevating body temperature is second only to the salmon shark's." - among sharks or among endothermic animals as a whole?
 * Clarified

Ucucha 21:59, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

I will now pass the article as a good article. The article seems very comprehensive and generally good; you should consider taking it to featured article candidates. Ucucha 22:28, 26 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks! -- Yzx (talk) 23:01, 26 February 2010 (UTC)