Talk:Port Adelaide Football Club/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)

I'll start the review. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)

There are no AFL team good articles at the moment, and I don't think any of them are remotely close to being in good shape. I imagine the best football team articles wouldn't be that different, so Liverpool F.C., Arsenal F.C., and Manchester United F.C. should all be decent guides for what this article should look like. (Albeit, I noticed all the AFL team articles have a "Club identity and symbols" section that football team articles have split into different sections. That's fine.) I've also reviewed and passed a handball team article, IFK Kristianstad, for GA status. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)

The most difficult point to address is probably the length of the history section, which is currently 6429 words. Compare that to Liverpool (1733 words), Arsenal (2012 words), and Manchester United (2737 words), the PAFC history section is about as long as all three of those clubs' history sections combined. Aim to cut it down to 3000 words, maybe 3250 would be fine if it's well-written. (And it's worth noting that there is already a separate article just for the club's history.) Sportsfan77777 (talk) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Apologies for the late reply, I was busy over the previous day or so. I should however, be relatively free until Friday. I'll respond to each comment in turn. Would I be right in identifying the areas that need the most significant cutback as the sections spanning 1974-1998 and 1999-2012? The large majority of the earlier sub-sections, as far as I can tell are much smaller in scope (That is, they only touch on points briefly - 1950-1973 is noticeably shorter despite covering a similar timespan.) Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 12:29, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I think that's fair with 1974-1998 and 1999-2012 needing the most shortening. The 1902-1915 section also seems like a lot for only 14 years (and I imagine it's probably not worth highlighting 5 game results from this period in boxes.). The SANFL post-AFL section also seems too detailed. I also wonder if all the date ranges are good as is? In particular, I feel like it makes more sense to start the 1999-2012 section with 1997 (when PAFC entered the AFL) instead of 1999 (when John Cahill left). And my guess is the pre-WWI era can be condensed into just one or two sections instead of four? Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:07, 20 December 2020 (UTC)
 * I think it may be worth leaving pre-WI as two sections (Before 1900/After 1900), as 1900 was the last wooden spoon, which make a good point to end the section. I agree with the highlighting of the games, barring the two 1914 games, as that year was of particular note for the club (and in the sport as a whole.) 1913 and 1910 however, weren't. I'll remove these once I get to it. I also agree with the 1997 start point for the AFL section. What I'll likely do is reformat it as follows - 1997 - 2010 and 2011 - present. (Covering two AFL coaches each, respectively.) Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:39, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
 * That sounds like it makes sense. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:06, 28 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ Everything should be covered now in terms of content removal. It'll be a case for citing and whatnot from now, but the content itself is complete. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:01, 2 January 2021 (UTC)

At the beginning, the lead for an article this size should be three to four paragraphs. Among the things it's missing is the progression of the club's history. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Although you provided the above articles as general guides - could you be a touch more specific in listing exactly what it's missing? I can cover the history issue, without a doubt, but having a more comprehensive list would be ideal so I can make multiple changes at once. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 12:29, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Sort of related to the history, the most important people in the club's history (probably a few coaches, and maybe a few players, or an executive) should be mentioned. The most important home grounds should be mentioned (Alberton Oval and Adelaide Oval, maybe Football Park depending on how you write it). Also, the most important club symbol(s) should be included (I'd lean toward the Prison Bars, and relate that to adding the silver and teal for the AFL). And then just to point out, the last statement (only pre-existing non-Victorian club in the AFL) is good in that it captures the team's status in relation to the rest of the AFL (and Australia or South Australia as a whole). Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:07, 20 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ I think my current rewrite should suffice? (pending references, of course). I've tried to condense the information as best as possible, but it seems to cover all the correct beats. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:39, 22 December 2020 (UTC)

The Prison Bar subsection doesn't need to be broken down into sub-subsections. In particular, there is way too much detail to the Prison Bars in the AFL section. It's not synthesized well, and there shouldn't be this many block quotes. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 * As a generalisation - would it be ideal to make that section about the Guernseys in general? By this, I mean relegating the Prison Bars to their own subsection, maintaining the one on the No. 1 Guernsey and incorporating the evolution (in the section immediately below) Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 12:29, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Yes, that sounds like a good idea! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:07, 20 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ Most of the content removed was about this year's controversy, which was largely not notable by itself and better covered by the phrasing that the guernsey's support is extremely high. I also removed all bar one of the block quotes, which I deemed relevant enough to keep. Those were the only notable removals, the rest was largely rephrasing, grouping information, etc. If it needs further work, direct me to the bits you think will need changing. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:39, 22 December 2020 (UTC)

The club songs should be synthesized into paragraphs. You don't need a separate sub-subsection for each song. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 12:29, 22 November 2020 (UTC)

The home grounds section should probably be its own section, not a subsection, and it should discuss the history of the club's stadiums, not just show them in pictures. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 * This seems reasonable - my only concern would be with Glanville Hall Estate, as there seems to be very little sourcing online in regards to this. Would a brief mention (1 or 2 lines) suffice? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 12:29, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Yes, that's fine. Is there a source for the dates? / Was it their only venue at the time? Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:07, 20 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Sources exist for Alberton, Football and Adelaide. The only small pieces (including under the first history section) related to Glanville are largely about the formation of Port, where they mention Glanville as their home, as that was the founder's property. I think the -1879 is filling in the gaps in knowledge, as we know they initially played at Glanville hall from 1870, and first became the tenants at Alberton in 1880 - it stands to reason Port occupied Glanville Hall Estate between 1870-1879. I don't think this is actually good wikipedia practice, if memory serves me. Disregard this section about filling in the gaps (although I still think that's what happened) - I found a source which specifically addresses Port's tenure ending at Glanville in 1879. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:39, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
 * I'm somewhat indecisive on this point, so I'll propose it to you - would including a description of stands and the like be important enough to include. The articles about the Premier League clubs do so to an extent, but I feel as though focusing on how the ground are connected to the club would be more appropriate for this section (as it stands, I'm writing two paragraphs for each, this would likely make each section three paragraphs instead.) Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 11:47, 23 December 2020 (UTC)
 * That seems like the right approach to focus on how the grounds are connected to the club, rather than specific details. Keep in mind though that the stands may still be important for things like when the ovals had increases in capacity (if/when new stands were added), which stands are named for Port players/coaches, and e.g. the members-only section at the Adelaide Oval. More exact details related to the stands themselves are not needed, if that's what you were thinking? Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:06, 28 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ Football Park and Adelaide Oval are still pending sourcing, but otherwise the wording formatting etc are done.Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 14:02, 29 December 2020 (UTC)

At the end, the Honour Board and the the Military Service list should go in separate article(s). If you want to leave these in, they should be collapsed by default, and the Honour Board can't be in all caps (or coloured to look like the actual honour board). Sportsfan77777 (talk) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I do agree with this idea - however, I'm not entirely sure an article on Military Service warrants its own article. I'd have to go look at notability requirements and the like before acting on this one. I have made them collapsible for now.Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 12:29, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Yeah, you're probably right. I just wanted to bring it up for consideration. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:07, 20 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Although I've already addressed this, are you certain it can't be in all caps? I know this is a matter of personal taste (and therefore, it shouldn't hold any weight in discussion), but I believe the board does look better in all caps (I don't mind removing the colouring however). Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:39, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
 * See MOS:ALLCAPS. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:06, 28 December 2020 (UTC)
 * From what I can tell, a situation like this isn't actually covered. I feel like it may be in the best interest to ask the community what the best course of actions is here. If you'd like, I'll add a discussion about this to the Port's talk page? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 14:02, 29 December 2020 (UTC)
 * You can ask on the Wikipedia talk:Manual of Style/Capital letters talk page. I'd be really surprised if it was supported, though. If you have your own personal photo of some or all of the actual honour board, you can upload that to the commons. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 22:12, 30 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:01, 2 January 2021 (UTC)

As a general note, every paragraph should end with a citation. There are a lot that don't. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I'll start working on this soon. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 12:29, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Removed the two citation needed notices the article had fairly quickly, so that's a good start. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:01, 2 January 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ I'd appreciate if you could have a gander at the page now. I've added over 100 references to it, so it should be much much more comprehensive in terms of referencing. I've tried to make notes of what I can/can't/need to still reference in my edit notes, but if you see something I haven't brought up myself, feel free to make note of it here. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:57, 4 February 2021 (UTC)

These are just the major points. I imagine there are probably a lot of minor line-by-line issues just from skimming the article. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 18:41, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 * You haven't brought this up in your review so far - but some of these problems (specifically, the lead and home grounds) are due to an overall length issue in the article. It currently spans approximately 61kb, meaning I believe we should consider shortening the article in areas (I've mentioned this in an above section without reply). Apart from those listed, would you have any recommendations to areas in which we could shorten/make independent? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 12:29, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * 61 kb is only a little over the limit (50 to 60 kb). Shortening the history section will probably take care of that, and balance out needing to expand any section that needs expanding. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:07, 20 December 2020 (UTC)

These are good points / questions. I'll get to them, I've been busy in real life lately. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:21, 7 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the response! Was afraid you'd abandoned the review. That's all fine, just answer them whenever you can. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 07:42, 7 December 2020 (UTC)
 * , I replied above, no rush to address anything, just pointing it out. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:07, 20 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Left a few responses to things currently relevant. Keep in mind, I'm saving a large amount of sourcing until after I know what and where to add things. Hopefully the two recent additions should solve two of those major issues you had. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:39, 22 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Left some comments under various items with some explanations to help clarify some decisions I made, or to explain why I agree/disagree with some of your points. I'll make an effort to change anything I haven't commented on in a timely manner, though. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)
 * I'm sending a ping just in case you've forgotten about the review here - it's been a couple of weeks with no update, and I'd just like clarification of some items. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 08:28, 26 February 2021 (UTC)
 * Minor question I have about the use of Wharf Pylons/Prison Bar nickname - which would be more appropriate to use consistently? To my understanding, the well known public equivalent should be the chosen name, whilst the original name should be acknowledged but not used in a widespread manner. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 01:53, 2 March 2021 (UTC)

History section

Here are some more specific comments on the history section. Overall, it's still 4517 words (which is a big improvement from the 6429 words at the start!), but probably still a bit too long. Maybe getting down to 3000 words was a bit of a stretch given that the club is much older than any of the comparison club FAs, but under 4000 words is probably still reasonable. I see some things that I'm pretty confident could be taken out. Even with the current version being too long, there are still probably at least a few things that are missing. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:16, 8 February 2021 (UTC)

1870

 * The club's first home ground was the family property of inaugural club president John Hart Jr in Glanville.[18] John Hart Sr would become premier of South Australia the week following the first match.[21] <<<=== This can just be mentioned in the grounds section.


 * A lot of this section is just WP:PROSELINE (In 1877, ... In 1878, ... In 1879, ...). This needs to be better synthesized into paragraphs.
 * There are a lot of "firsts" listed. You probably don't need all of them.


 * The rules of the Old Adelaide club, which more closely resembled the rules used in Melbourne at the time, were ultimately adopted across Adelaide in 1876.[22] In 1877, Port Adelaide joined seven other clubs to form the South Australian Football Association (SAFA), the first ever governing body of Australian rules football. <<<=== You probably only need the second sentence. I think the source says the formation of the SAFA led to a common set of rules being adopted in 1877, not 1876.


 * During the 19th century the club had nicknames including the Cockledivers, the Seaside Men, the Seasiders and the Magentas. <<<=== This could be moved to the club symbols section.
 * ✅ Fair enough point - I'd debated doing this myself, but felt it didn't really fit in without creating a new section to accommodate it. That, combined with the club's largely stagnant image (and nickname) since the 1900's lead to me leaving it in as acknowledgement to the presence of nicknames, without necessarily going into an unnecessary level of detail. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)

1902

 * The 1902 paragraph could probably be condensed.


 * Port Adelaide was disqualified from a game with South Adelaide after disputing the use of an unaccredited umpire. <<<=== disqualified the finals, not just a game, right?
 * ✅ I believe the former was a consequence of the latter - they were disqualified from a finals match, so their opponent was permitted to continue on through the series, whilst Port 'lost' the match and had their season ended prematurely. The correct terminology should be game though, as it was only that game they were disqualified from. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 14:35, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Following a premiership in the 1906 season,[42] Port Adelaide would travel to NSW in the early 1907 season in what was marketed as 'Port Adelaide vs. Sydney'.[43] <<<=== This doesn't seem important.
 * ✅ I elected to keep this less for the Sydney game, and more for the 1906 comment. I struggled to find a natural way of mentioning it independently without going into detail, hence the seven word summary. However, especially considering I skipped over numerous premierships at later points, I'll remove this. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * In the 1910 paragraph, is anything important besides the SAFL premiership and the Champions of Australia?
 * The Broken Hill/NSW section, probably not. I'd argue however, the two West Australian teams are important. (it is considered prestigious to beat a team such as the combined WAFL team.) I've only removed the former for now. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 14:48, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * You probably don't need the 1911 to 1912 paragraph.
 * Partially agree. I think it's important to highlight that the club was dominant yet unsuccessful prior to 1914, however, I'll concede that the TFL comment is probably unnecessary. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * You probably don't need the score of the 1913 championships.

1916

 * The first sentence sounds more like the players left the team to go to the war, rather than they died. You also probably don't need to list the players if they weren't particularly significant as players.


 * Port Adelaide would initially struggle ===>>> Port Adelaide initially struggled


 * Clarify they only won two premierships in 1921 and 1928 in 17 years (did I count that correctly?) after the war.


 * At the end of the 1922 SAFA season, Port Adelaide travelled to Sydney and played a combined New South Wales side on the Sydney Cricket Ground winning the match. <<<=== Similar to the last section, are the matches with Sydney significant?
 * ✅ I didn't add either of these initially, but if I add to guess it would be because they're both representations of the 'wharf' cities, combined with NSW being Rugby League territory. However, I do agree it's probably not notable. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * As above, you probably don't need to list all of the players who died.

1950

 * At the end of the 1951 season the VFL premiers Geelong visited South Australia to play the local premiers Port Adelaide on Adelaide Oval. Geelong won the match 8.14 (62) to 6.18 (54). <<<=== This can be shortened. Just say they lost an exhibition to the VFL premiers.


 * Port Adelaide reached the Grand Final again in 1953 against West Torrens. West Torrens won the premiership by 7 points.[82] <<<=== Is this significant?
 * ✅ Ah, this is actually an artefact of a removal I already performed. It's more significant for West Torrens than Port Adelaide, as that Grand Final was the final one West Torrens would contest and win. I opted to leave it in as it was Port's final loss before the six premierships, but will remove it. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * During the 1950s Port Adelaide and Melbourne, often the premiers of South Australian and Victorian leagues respectively, played exhibition matches at Norwood Oval. <<<=== Either this sentence or the above Geelong sentence seems out of order if the Geelong match was one of these matches.
 * ✅ I forgot to add a 'mid-' to 1950s here, my mistake. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The following season, Port Adelaide would again finish third. [89] <<<=== Is this significant?


 * There should be some synthesis to Fos Williams's achievements: How many premierships did he win?
 * Did you miss "In 1965 Fos Williams coached his ninth and last premiership in-front of 62,543 people,[78] the largest ever crowd at Adelaide Oval.[92]"? Or are you asking for more detail in regard to his achievements? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * In the box score thing, shouldn't the team in bold be the one that won?
 * I elected to bold Port Adelaide, as obviously this page is focused on the club. This seems to be common practice on season summary pages focused on the individual teams as well, so I figured this practice would be ideal here. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)

1974

 * In 1975 a dispute between the Port Adelaide City Council and the SANFL over the use of Alberton Oval forced Port Adelaide to move its home matches to Adelaide Oval for two seasons. ... In 1977 the dispute regarding Alberton Oval was resolved and the club moved back to Alberton Oval. <<<=== Move to grounds section?


 * The club completed its fourth ever 'Triple Crown', winning the premiership, Magarey Medal and having the SANFL's leading goalkicker in a single season. <<<=== It may be correct to highlight only this one, but just checking: were any of the other three worth highlighting?
 * ✅The fourth Triple Crown independently isn't itself what is notable - rather, the achievements that were part of it are what made this particular one notable. 1914 is arguably also notable, but that year is already notable for being the undefeated year. The other two prior, as far as I'm aware, aren't notable. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * There should be some synthesis to Cahill's achievements: How many premierships did he win?


 * I don't know if you need any of the block quotes, unless the quote itself is still famous today.
 * The George Fiacchi quote was certainly relevant and was brought up while the club was at risk of folding in 2010. Russell Ebert's quote not necessarily famous. I do have a minor concern about removing it, though - although not necessarily relevant for GA reviews, it would cause a weird formatting quirk in the text around that area, with half the paragraph filling the page and half in between the picture and box score. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * There should definitely be a lot of detail on Port trying to enter the AFL, but I think at present, there is still too much.
 * What specifically should I remove? I've tried to condense the 1991 events as best I can, and can't really see any pieces fit for removal. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Is the 1990 game worth the box score? I don't even see it in the prose.
 * ✅ I left it in as it did appear notable at first, as it was the final one without an AFL presence in the state. However, on reflection it would probably be better suited to a hisotry of the SANFL in general, not just Port Adelaide. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)

1997

 * Port Adelaide opened the 2004 season well with four straight wins, but then won only four of its next eight games <<<=== The paragraph structure is not good here. This sentence doesn't properly summarize the 2004 season.


 * This section still seems a bit long.
 * ✅Likewise with the above in regards to Port AFL entry detail, what should I remove more specifically? I'm going to largely remove the 2007 content and condense it to being Runner's up + losing by a record margin, but anything else worth removing? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)

2011

 * They hosted Richmond in the elimination finals, kicking the first seven goals of the game and leading by as much as 87 points before recording a 57-point victory.[163] After defeating Fremantle in the semi-finals, the club's season ended with a three-point loss to Hawthorn in the preliminary finals. <<<=== For the emphasis here, the first game is not the most important but it has the most detail. I would instead emphasize the second game.
 * I'm not sure how familiar you are with AFL as a sport, but typically a notable game consists of an extremely high or low margin. Despite the Fremantle game being a 'more important' final, the first game is more notable for said leading margin of 87 points. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * There are no players mentioned in this section.
 * I would mention any if possible, but none of the club's players have done anything of particularly noteworthy status (i.e: Winning the Brownlow, Coleman Medal etc.). At best I would say Robbie Gray won the AFLCA award in 2014, but comparatively to other awards it is not considered a notable award to win. The other way this could be rectified would be possibly mentioning captain changes, but this would then draw the issue of inconsistency with previous sections, especially 1997-2010. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Rounds 20 and 21 saw the club lose to Collingwood and Hawthorn by record margins of 138 and 165 respectively.[155] The following season, a loss against expansion team Greater Western Sydney. ... Assistant coach, Garry Hocking, took over for the remaining four games. <<<=== I don't think this is needed.
 * Agree with Garry Hocking, disagree with the record losses. Those losses are the worst in the combined SANFL/AFL history of the club, so they are of a noteworthy status - they also serve the purpose of highlighting why the season was the worst in 100+ years. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 13:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)

Overall, the worst issue is probably the proseline in the 1870 section. Other key issues are some paragraphs not having good structure, in particular with (1) the introduction sentences not summarizing the paragraph, or (2) a series of accomplishments over a range of years (such as with one coach) not being summarized somewhere. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:16, 8 February 2021 (UTC)
 * Not to sound impatient, but you haven't posted any updates to this review in over a month. I understand you're busy, both with real life and your own featured article/good article processes you need to attend to, but I would really appreciate if we could hammer out this the rest of the review. Thanks! Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 16:14, 5 April 2021 (UTC)

Alright, here are comments on all the other sections. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 09:13, 10 April 2021 (UTC)

No. 1 guernsey

 * at least in the eyes ===>>> at least in the view ("eyes" is informal)


 * Link Kilkenny


 * Charles Hayter granted ===>>> Hayter granted


 * It was re-instated the following season, after ===>>> It was re-instated the following season when

Number panel

 * the latter becoming the design of choice until 1928 ===>>> the latter becoming the design of choice on tours until 1928 (It was just interstate until 1928, right?)
 * I believe I can say no, the number panels and numbers were used in the SANFL, but I also don't have any direct source of when exactly mandatory numbers (and panels) were added to competition. Would you like me to better clarify this? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 15:33, 10 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Sure, the current wording makes it sound like it didn't become permanent until 1928. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 22:49, 10 April 2021 (UTC)


 * The club has used the panel continuously since 1953 in the SANFL. ===>>> The The club reintroduced the panel in 1953 and has since continuously used it in the SANFL.


 * The panel was also present on the club's inaugural AFL jumper, before being phased out after 2009. ===>>> The panel was also present on the club's AFL jumper until it was phased out in 2009. (also, is )


 * In addition to its long time use by the club, the number panel is also used as a reflection of a local Magpie species, present on the badge of South Australia. <<<=== I know what you're trying to say, but the way the sentence is structured doesn't make sense.


 * Not so sure, but is "jumper" too informal? (i.e. just "guernsey" instead)
 * ✅It's an Australian colloquialism for guernsey. Under that pretense, I'd argue it's not necessarily wrong if it was defined, but I don't really see a need to define it at the current moment. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 15:33, 10 April 2021 (UTC)

Prison bar

 * Regarding the title, is the "prison bar" name definitively more prevalent than the "wharf pylon" name today?
 * ✅This is the case, yes. As you recommended a rewrite of the introduction, I've added the alternate name in there which should address any need for any "/". The Wharf Pylons name is still occasionally used, but it extremely rare in comparison to 'Prison Bars' moniker. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 16:03, 10 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Needs a better first sentence for an introduction. I might suggest something like "Historically, Port Adelaide's most iconic guernsey has been its Wharf Pylon design, previously more commonly known as the Wharf Pylon design."


 * that would repeatedly last ===>>> that could repeatedly last


 * the club would win 33 premierships and 3 Championships of Australia. ===>>> the club won 33 premierships and 3 Championships of Australia.


 * fans of the rival football clubs ===>>> fans of rival football clubs


 * The Prison Bar nickname first originated <<<=== This paragraph is missing something. You say it started as a bad thing, but today is accepted as a good thing. The section is missing (1) saying that it's now a good thing, and (2) how it stopped being a bad thing.
 * This is... difficult to pin-point to be honest. As far as I could tell, there's not a set reason why the change occurred - I'm adding a statement about the fanbase adopting the nickname to mark that it is now a good thing, but I'll need to investigate that transition to see if I can find anything to use as a supporting reference. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 16:03, 10 April 2021 (UTC)


 * prison-bar ===>>> Prison Bar (to keep consistency)


 * Before "The club was first granted the right to wear", something like "Since changing its guernsey, Port Adelaide has made numerous requests to the AFL to wear the Prison Bar guernsey in specific games, only some of which have been approved." That could also probably start a new paragraph.


 * Relatedly, I might just combine the next two paragraphs into that same paragraph where the requests are first mentioned.


 * the club was waiting for confirmation from the AFL <<<=== You don't need to say that they were waiting, just that they reached an agreement for something that they were previously denied


 * On 9 September 2020, it was revealed that memorabilia associated with ===>>> The memorabilia associated with
 * I think memorabilia is correct in the context it is used here? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 16:03, 10 April 2021 (UTC)


 * In the figure caption, I might just say "Wharf Pylon guernsey" given the time period. (trying to avoid having to use a "/")

Evolution

 * Maybe four and four instead of five and three is better balanced, especially given the partition with the black and white guernseys.
 * Better yet, maybe a table would work better. That way, you could put the "Uniform history" and "Team statistics" next to each guernsey.
 * If you don't do the table, the issue of the "Uniform history" and "Team statistics" not should still be addressed somehow. Right now, it's too difficult to connect each of these notes to their respective guernseys.
 * ✅ For all of the above Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 08:22, 16 April 2021 (UTC)

Club songs

 * Over the years, Port Adelaide has used various songs and music at its games. <<<=== This isn't an adequate summary. Either "They have had four official songs at different times" or "three main official songs" or "two main official songs in the SANFL and one in the AFL" or "two main official songs in the SANFL, and one main official song and an anthem in the AFL".


 * There are a few instances of just "Port" instead of "Port Adelaide"


 * Combine the first three paragraphs (all of the pre-AFL things).


 * Relatedly, "The song remained in use until 1971" ===>>> "The song remained in use until 1971 when Port Adelaide secretary Bob McLean..."


 * Because the club is not officially known as 'Port Power'... <<<=== This sentence needs a citation.
 * Alright, this one is uniquely difficult because weird situations surrounding it. I've been searching for citations to support this statement for a rather long time, but I haven't been able to find anything.
 * Currently, I've re-worded it to better reflect events that transpired. Port Adelaide was initially the Port Power, then dropped the Port in 2001. This coincided with a minor logo change. However, there are extremely minimal records pertaining to these changes ever occuring, barring the physical existence of said changes themselves. Finding records of the song, nickname and logo change are near next to impossible, despite them clearly having occurred. I can keep searching, but I can't guarantee anything will turn up, frustratingly. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 16:32, 10 April 2021 (UTC)


 * various and unique difficulties the club faced when trying to enter the AFL. <<<=== Is this mainly the split of the SANFL and AFL teams? (If so, I don't think just stating that a few sentence later is clear enough.)
 * ✅I've opted to remove the second statement about resonating, and provide the reason behind this statement. Is this more sufficient? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 16:32, 10 April 2021 (UTC)

Logo evolution

 * Port Adelaide has adopted different insignia's on several occasions throughout its history. <<<=== Also could summarize the logos better. Something like "Up until 2020, Port Adelaide's insignias were designed around having one or several magpies."


 * different insignia's ===>>> different insignias


 * and a fence wire ===>>> or a fence wire


 * adopt colours and insignia ===>>> adopt colours and an insignia


 * sliver fist ===>>> silver fist


 * Prion Bar ===>>> Prison Bar


 * The new PA 1870 logo is permanent, right? If so, that should be stated.

Glanville

 * After foundation, it was decided that Port Adelaide's home ground would Glanville Hall Estate <<<=== If you aren't going to mention who decided, then you could simplify to "Port Adelaide's first home ground was"
 * ✅ - I changed this to directly reference the Hart family. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 08:22, 16 April 2021 (UTC)


 * following 1979 <<<=== following 1879

Alberton

 * The following year, the decision was made by the club to start leasing the oval from the Port Adelaide Council for the sum of 10 shillings a year. <<<=== Add they still lease it today (if that's true?)


 * The club is also used ===>>> The oval has also been used


 * with SANFL training temporarily moving to Ethelton between 1997 and 2001 ===>>> aside from 1997 through 2001 when SANFL training temporarily moved to Ethelton. (and link Ethelton)


 * The club would usually split ===>>> The club usually split


 * Pending the 1977 season ===>>> With the 1977 season pending


 * is oldest remaining structure ===>>> is the oldest remaining structure


 * Allan Scott Power Headquarters <<<=== clarify "for its administration" and link Allan Scott.

Football Park

 * it would host all night matches ===>>> it hosted every team's night matches


 * The club was assigned ===>>> Port Adelaide was assigned (to avoid confusion with Adelaide in the previous sentence)


 * redevelopment of the oval <<<=== which oval?

Adelaide Oval

 * Adelaide Oval is the current home ground of Port Adelaide's AFL team ===>>> Since 2014, Adelaide Oval has been the home ground of Port Adelaide's AFL team (avoid "current", per MOS:RELTIME)


 * was supplanted by Football Park <<<=== when?

Club creed

 * Okay.

Adelaide

 * Port Adelaide is often considered the best, and most bitter, <<<=== This seems subjective. Has the AFL itself stated this?
 * ✅ They haven't. I've reworded it slightly to be more generalised 'to be among the best', as opposed to an outright top position. I also removed bitter at the same time. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 17:08, 10 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "bitter" isn't a very encyclopedic term
 * ✅ - See above Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 08:22, 16 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Add the current Showdown record?
 * Defo a good idea, and may add this in future, but probably unnecessary for the moment Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 17:08, 10 April 2021 (UTC)

Brisbane

 * couldn't be separated <<<=== too informal


 * Ladder ===>>> ladder


 * In the following years, the rivalry died down ===>>> The rivalry has since died down.

Norwood

 * The two clubs would meet for the first time ===>>> The two clubs met for the first time


 * follow up game ===>>> follow-up game


 * Port's accession ===>>> Port Adelaide's accession


 * In 1884, Port Adelaide would win ===>>> In 1884, Port Adelaide won


 * would bring Port Adelaide's own ===>>> brought Port Adelaide's own


 * Grand Finals <<<=== not consistent with capitalization


 * Port winning in 1999 ===>>> Port Adelaide winning in 1999

Current playing lists

 * Section name ===>>> "Playing lists"

Corporate

 * The guernsey sponsors shouldn't be collapsed or smaller font.


 * Overall, you can also simplify the guernsey sponsors if you look at the example from Liverpool F.C. where they combine years together.


 * Before 1978, were there no sponsors or is it unknown?
 * This is the former, to the best of my knowledge. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 03:06, 11 April 2021 (UTC)


 * The administrative positions and sponsors aren't cited, except one.
 * ✅ Found and addressed.


 * The sponsor sub-sub-headers (e.g. Current major sponsors) might be better off as bold text (e.g. Current major sponsors) than sub-sub-headers.


 * I've seen other AFL team articles do this, but I don't understand why supporters are a part of corporate?
 * Actually, I had never thought about this until you brought it up. I'm not quite sure myself, but I may be partially because it doesn't warrant an individual section, but doesn't fit elsewhere? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 03:06, 11 April 2021 (UTC)

Supporters

 * Could expand this probably, but you don't have to.
 * - It's probably fine for the moment. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 08:22, 16 April 2021 (UTC)

Partnerships

 * Link Kaurna


 * John Hart Sr ===>>> John Hart Sr.


 * The indigenous section feels like it is missing something, with just one sentence covering the last 50 years.


 * You don't need to say "announced" in the China section. (three instances)


 * As part of the partnership, Port Adelaide also agreed to run an Australian rules football program in over 20 Chinese schools, culminating in a football carnival the same week the AFL premiership match is held in Shanghai <<<=== Is this just for 2017 or every year?
 * ✅ - It was for each year of the partnership.


 * The first AFL game played for premiership points <<<=== The clarification "for points" seems to imply another AFL game not for points, but I think it actually was the first in general.
 * ✅ The source linked actually addresses this - another game was played there in 2010, an exhibition match between Melbourne and Brisbane. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 03:05, 11 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Maybe mention Port Adelaide has won all three games thus far.
 * - Port Adelaide's performances are not particularly relevant to the content of the partnership, so I opted not to mention them. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 08:22, 16 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Following the COVID-19 pandemic ===>>> Due to the COVID-19 pandemic


 * I remember the media noting these could games have record TV attendance, but I had trouble finding something concrete that wasn't just a prediction.
 * I added a note about TV ratings in 2019 (it's notable enough to list at least), but nothing about the match itself having record ratings. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 03:05, 11 April 2021 (UTC)

Club honour boards

 * Just noting that I fixed the dashes.
 * You need to cite who is on the honour board.


 * , when it inducted the inaugural 18 members into the Hall of Fame. ===>>>, when it inducted 18 inaugural members.


 * 40 players ===>>> 40 more players


 * In the hall of fame panel, the doctor symbol should be explained at the bottom after the bold and italics explanations.
 * I believe this reason this isn't done is because it's a template also used on Melbourne Football Club's page, where they do not feature a Club Doctor. (making it redundant for that page) It's currently got a hover=over explanation, if that suffices? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:10, 11 April 2021 (UTC)


 * announced its greatest team ===>>> announced its Greatest Team (and also, explain it's not literally its greatest team.)


 * Explain who is on the war honour roll (is it every serviceperson?)


 * The war honour roll link is dead, but you can add the archived link here.
 * ✅ - I have instead opted to add the current link from Port Adelaide's site. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 08:22, 16 April 2021 (UTC)

SANFL presence post AFL entry

 * This section is out of place at the bottom in-between the honour board and the club achievements. I would move it to after the history section, or maybe even make it the final sub-section of the history section.


 * Move the season summaries to after the club honour board list (as it is basically the same thing). Maybe it would be better as a sub-sub-section as part of the club honour board sub-section?


 * There should be a key for the Magarey Medallists like in the main honour board.


 * The season summaries should also be cited.


 * The writing part is not organized so well. The first paragraph should start off with something like "After Port Adelaide obtained an AFL license, the club instead fielded a reserve team under the same club name to take its place and continue to compete in the SANFL, in spite of efforts from the SANFL to separate Port Adelaide's SANFL team from its AFL team." And the second paragraph should start off with something like. "In response to the SANFL's efforts to divide the club, Port Adelaide began trying to reunite the club in 2010" (not sure about the date).


 * in 1998–99 ===>>> in 1998 and 1999


 * remove all the "would"s in the results paragraphs

Club achievements

 * Add an overarching citation at the end of this section.
 * ✅ As no such overarching citation exists (the closest I could find was one from Sturt, but Port does not have this.), would I be able to add individual citations after each win count? Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 07:37, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Yes, that's fine. (The "Level" column might make more sense.) Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:44, 26 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Taken care of. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 04:20, 28 April 2021 (UTC)

New comments
Minor comments
 * You don't need citations in the lead. (see WP:CITELEAD)
 * Addressed, barring one. I left it as the lead is the only place where the club's unique status is mentioned (and is probably the only appropriate place).


 * In the lead, remove "current" both times here (per MOS:RELTIME): The club has played at their current SANFL home ground, Alberton Oval, since 1880 and has used their current AFL home ground, Adelaide Oval, since 2014.
 * Addressed.


 * colours of Teal and Silver <<<=== I would assume lowercase?
 * Addressed.


 * The 1890 box score seems "wrong" in that it only includes and not the behinds or totals. Was the scoring system the same back then?
 * No, it wasn't. The Scoring System during the majority of 1800s was to only count Goals towards the final score. (Behinds were recorded, but were irrelevant) As a result, the box score reflects this.


 * Even if you can't source the oldest sponsors, you could probably source all of the AFL ones.
 * Addressed.

Bigger comments
 * The SANFL presence could still be better organised. In general, it should be more like "Since Port Adelaide joined the AFL, it has also had this setup in the SANFL. [and then talk about agreements and/or efforts]" The most important outcomes of the agreements and efforts seem to be too buried in the middle of the paragraph.
 * As far as I could tell, you were specifing the first paragraph here. As a result, I've reordered this paragraph to place the information pertaining to the seperate legal entities first, the ground/players, and finally the 'why' (SANFL clubs).


 * Based off of "The Port Adelaide Football Club has a long-standing connection to the indigenous community.", I would still think this section could more densely cover the last 50 years or so.
 * I've covered all that's really avalible to cover in detail. That statement is addressing the length of time the club has been connected with the community (effectively since founding). However, I have opted to add a count of indidgenous players to the section to add a minor piece of detail.


 * Looking at the English football example articles (e.g. Liverpool F.C.), one thing I noticed is that they all have a decent amount of prose in the "Honours" section where they list all of the club's titles. The equivalent here would be to have a prose introduction in the "Club achievements" section.
 * Addressed. It's only a few lines, but it's roughly the same prose length as Arsenal F.C..

Other than that, I guess it's close to done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:26, 9 May 2021 (UTC)


 * All addressed! I'll list my changes below your comments. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 17:22, 20 May 2021 (UTC)


 * Just a question that I've recently thought of, and figured I may as well get your opinion on it. Would it be worth converting some of the Membership/Revenue/Attendance table into prose and deleting the table in its current form? It's in a yearly list format, is currently unreferenced as is, and I figured Membership Count can fall under Supporters as prose, whilst the Ladder position is already covered in the Honour Board. The Annual Revenue isn't particularly notable, nor is the Average Home Crowd. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 11:08, 5 June 2021 (UTC)


 * Looking at some of the other teams, some form of this chart seems to be in every article, but it's not consistent everywhere. I think all of them have the list of members (There's a site with all of the numbers through 2017. I don't know if something better than that exists. I didn't realize it wasn't cited before). The ladder positions are redundant, but they seem to appear in almost every chart. I think that's fine because you might expect to look for a correlation between membership numbers and ladder position. I think most of the team articles also have the average home crowd. The revenue numbers seem to be the least common out of all of those columns. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:00, 5 June 2021 (UTC)
 * I don't think any of the columns are an issue (albeit, they should be cited). It might be a good idea for the AFL project to try to standardize the chart. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 21:00, 5 June 2021 (UTC)


 * What I've elected to do, as seen in my edit summary, is remove the revenue column (it's easily the least important, hence why it would appear the least often I'd assume) in addition to using the annual reports created by the AFL for membership numbers. I also used a third party site that listed year-on-year attendances and filtered it to provide the Average Home crowds for that column. 100% agree about standardisation though, I'll likely bring it up at a later date. Empoleonmaster23 (talk) 06:26, 6 June 2021 (UTC)

Okay, I'm content with passing the article now. All of the major concerns have been addressed and are in much better shape, and it looks good enough to set a decent example for other team articles. Good work! And apologies for taking so long. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 20:42, 26 June 2021 (UTC)