Talk:Portia White/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 02:40, 20 May 2020 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Well structured and well written.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * Good use of reliable sources. I looked through all matches above 3% on Earwig's Copyvio Tool, and had no concerns.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Based on my reading of the sources used, the coverage is appropriate and balanced.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Suitable tone of voice maintained throughout.
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

I'm happy to discuss, or be challenged on, any of my review comments. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 02:40, 20 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your work on this article. It reads well and makes good use of reliable sources. I have a couple of points for consideration, noted below. Let me know if you have any questions. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:25, 20 May 2020 (UTC)

Check of Sources
 * Canadian Encyclopedia ✔️
 * "Canadian contralto Portia White's life on the stage" ✔️ Redundant as a reference as the Canadian Encyclopedia also verifies full name, date of birth and place of birth. Consider making this an external link instead. ✅ BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "Performer, educator Lorne White dies" ✔️
 * "Senator Donald Oliver" ✔️
 * Ito
 * "where her mother was also the musical director" - I couldn't see where this was verified by this source. It is verified in Nurse (1998). ✅ BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Nurse (2009) - preview not available on Google Books for me. No reason not to assume good faith.
 * Hamilton (2009) - only part of the preview was available on Google Books for me. No reason not to assume good faith.
 * Nurse (1998) ✔️
 * The Centre for Canadian Studies ✔️
 * Forster
 * "even receiving a surprise career management offer from Oxford University Press" - This sounds surprising to me, but I don't think the source quite supports that description, so I'd suggest changing it to something like the blander "and received a career management offer..." ✅ BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "an expensive white fox cape" - Source doesn't mention that it was expensive, so I suggest omitting that word. ✅ BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Hamilton (2004) ✔️
 * Arsenault ✔️
 * Choi ✔️
 * Marcogliese ✔️
 * Our History - Nova Scotia Talent Trust ✔️
 * Special awards - Nova Scotia Talent Trust ✔️
 * Arts Nova Scotia ✔️
 * Parks Canada ✔️
 * Halifax Regional Municipality - Official Street List ✔️
 * Devereaux ✔️
 * Poland
 * Has the title as Portia rather than Portia White: First You Dream. Maybe add another reference - Portia White: First You Dream should have some. ✅ BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Victoria Playhouse
 * Unless it's an issue with how the page displays on mobile, there doesn't seem to be any supporting text on this page, even the title of the work. I don't think this is being used to verify anything that isn't covered elsewhere so consider moving this to external links. ✅ BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)


 * CBC Books ✔️

Thank you for the review -- I appreciate the thorough sourcing check, and I've incorporated your suggestions above (all sensible!). The only item I had some trouble with was the Portia stage play title: I hadn't realized it, but the play seems to have gone through multiple name changes. I added an additional source and noted that the play is sometimes simply "Portia". Please let me know if there is anything else in the article I need to address. Cheers, Alanna the Brave (talk) 15:19, 20 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for making the amendments. I'm happy to pass this for GA. Well done! Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)