Talk:Predation risk allocation hypothesis

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Thank you for the suggestions for my article! These will be really helpful for developing the article into the final draft. Nlstudent18 (talk) 20:53, 18 March 2018 (UTC)

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Peer Review
Nice work! Your article seems well-researched. I like that you included examples of research satisfying the hypothesis in addition to research that doesn’t— it’s a good balance, and you maintain a very neutral tone.

I have a few suggestions or points to consider:

Lead paragraph
 * The second sentence might be a bit redundant
 * I was a bit confused as to whether the hypothesis was about animals in situations where they might be prey or situations where they might predate, maybe you could explain the hypothesis a bit more clearly
 * When you say “effectiveness is mixed,” I’m not sure if this is clear as to whether there are mixed results or mixed opinions among scientists
 * I’m not sure if Wiki articles should typically refer to “the article” in a transition statement

Hypothesis section
 * It’s not clear what the second prediction is
 * Maybe you could elaborate on why the model doesn’t work for certain animals— how come some animals know the risk while others don’t?
 * In general, I think it would help to elaborate more. How can animals respond to more predators without being aware of the risk?

Effectiveness section
 * Maybe you should specify the species that the research was focussed on (ex. Do all snails fit the hypothesis?)
 * Elaborate (especially the fish example)
 * Some pictures would be nice here

Conclusion
 * I’m not sure Wiki articles typically have conclusions
 * Is the perceived need for research determining the usefulness of the hypothesis your opinion? Or the general consensus in the scientific community? Or the conclusion of a couple scientists?

Overall, it mostly seems like you just need to elaborate a bit more on different points to make them clear. Otherwise, well done. AlexandraHayward (talk) 01:42, 15 March 2018 (UTC)