Talk:Princess Monster Wife/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 20:43, 22 March 2017 (UTC)


 * Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 20:43, 22 March 2017 (UTC)


 * Comments
 * In the phrase "all boy demographic groups", do you think you have to specify the age ranges as done in the cited source?
 * So as to not clutter the intro, I specified the ranges only in the Reception section. Is that OK?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   15:16, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Makes sense to me. Aoba47 (talk) 15:47, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * I think you can combine the first and second paragraphs in the "Plot" section together as they are both rather short.
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   15:16, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * I am not certain about the structure of the first sentence for the second paragraph of the "Production" section. I think it is primarily the ", according to Ward", which I feel is a little shoe-horned into the sentence. It has great content, but I think it could stated in a stronger way.
 * I sort of re-wrote the entire first part of the production section. Here is what it looks like now.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   15:28, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your response. Aoba47 (talk) 15:47, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * In the following sentence, who is "he"? I am assuming you are referencing Ward, but I think it could be made clearer.
 * See above.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   15:28, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Looks good to me. Aoba47 (talk) 15:47, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Could you expand on how the song was inspired by "A Whole New World"? If there is not further information on it, then it is fine as it currently stands, but some expansion would be nice.
 * Unfortunately, all I've been able to find out is that the song was inspired by "A Whole New World", and not why. Most of the sources which examine the song look at some of its oddness (e.g. the cat meowing), rather than the inspiration for it. Bummer.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   15:28, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * That is unfortunate, but it is fine as it currently stands then. Aoba47 (talk) 15:47, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Do you think that you should provide the date that he released the demo of the song on twitter? It could provide a better context for when it was released versus the episode's broadcast.
 * Good idea. I have added it.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   15:16, 23 March 2017 (UTC)


 * Final comments
 * Wonderful work as always. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 14:56, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * How does these changes look?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   15:28, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your prompt responses. I will ✅ this. Aoba47 (talk) 15:47, 23 March 2017 (UTC)