Talk:Prior Park Landscape Garden/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:56, 31 August 2015 (UTC)

Comments - nice piece of work. Neat article, a few issues noted above, so I'll place it on hold for a bit. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:27, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * I think I'd be happier to see where the Garden is before being told who designed it.
 * Reworded.&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Funnily enough, I don't think poet needs linking but landscape gardener perhaps does...
 * Links changed.&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Is there a suitable link for "Grade I listed"?
 * I don't think so - different to listed building etc.&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * National Trust is overlinked in the lead; worse: the second one is incorrect.
 * Changed.&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "orihinally" typo.
 * Ooops - fixed.&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "Humphrey Colles, then Matthew Colhurst" any context for who these folks were?
 * Both MPs - the reference given doesn't say this but History of Parliament gives their details but doesn't include ownership of Prior Park so I'm not sure whether to include additional references for the claim that they were MPs?&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * It would be helpful, otherwise you might as well just say it was purchased twice, and not include the details. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:09, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Links & refs added.&mdash; Rod talk 20:27, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "Purchased by Ralph Allen in the 1720s.[2] Prior Park's " comma probably.
 * Changed.&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "Prior Park's 11.3 hectares ... house, Prior Park," this works oddly to me, you link Prior Park on the second instance in this sentence, and it appears you may be using Prior Park to describe both the Garden and the house in the same sentence...
 * I've removed the second reference to Prior Park which at the time was all one thing which included both house & gardens.&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * English landscape garden is overlinked.
 * I see this once in the lead & once in 18th century design.&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Twice in the latter section. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:09, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Ah one was English Landscape Garden and once English Garden - both pointing to the same place - now done.&mdash; Rod talk 15:25, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "1750s and '60s" not sure on MOS here, but I would prefer to see 1760s rather than '60s.
 * Done.&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "Prior Park's 11.3 hectares (28 acres) English landscape garden was laid out" vs "In 1993 11.3 hectares (28 acres) of the park" so, all of it?
 * Yep (everything but the house/school) removed in the Restoration section.&mdash; Rod talk
 * Plus I'd expect a comma after 1993.
 * Is this still needed now the area has been removed?&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Ref 23 could use an en-dash in that year range rather than a hyphen.
 * I've never understood the purpose of this distinction, but hopefully done.&mdash; Rod talk 12:19, 31 August 2015 (UTC)

"During 1737, at least 55,200 trees, mostly elm and Scots pine, were planted, along the sides and top of the valley. The valley floor remained as grassland and drainage water was channelled to form fish ponds at the bottom of the valley." needs referencing, then I think we're done. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:45, 31 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Ref added (in the history tab of the Parks & Gardens UK record).&mdash; Rod talk 21:21, 31 August 2015 (UTC)

All good, I'll pass to GA. If you could just tweak that ISBN so it's the "preferred" format, that'd be great. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:06, 1 September 2015 (UTC)