Talk:Private speech/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Delldot (talk · contribs) 16:12, 18 January 2013 (UTC)

Hi, thanks for working on and improving this article. Sorry it's taken so long to get it a review. I'm going to place it "on hold" meaning promotion will be pending your improvements to the article based on my comments. If I don't hear back in a week I'll assume you're no longer interested in working on it and go ahead and fail the article. But that wouldn't mean you can't improve it later--you can come back and start working on it again any time you want, whether or not you want to resubmit it for GA status. If you're interested in making improvements, let me know and I'll be happy to help however I can. Below I've listed some comments for you to work on if you're still interested in getting the article promoted. If you do these, there will be a lot more. I won't lie, this is a long process that involves a lot of work.


 * The WP:lead section needs to summarize the whole article. If there's a section on it in the article, it should be touched on in the lead.  So expand the lead to cover things it doesn't yet mention, e.g. memory benefits, research.


 * Define technical terms. Assume your reader has no specialized knowledge.
 * Examples: "inner speech"


 * Images are recommended. Maybe you can find some to kind of illustrate behaviors in children mentioned in the article.


 * I really like the example with the "interesting new toy", maybe we can have such an example in the lead, I think the sooner concrete examples are introduced in the article the easier it will be for the reader to grasp what the phenomenon is and how it's used.


 * The article may need to be expanded--I'm not sure it's comprehensive enough. If a lot has been written about it, we could probably add more here in order to cover the topic in more depth.  Let me know what your thoughts are on this and we can figure it out together.

That's what I got for now. If you're interested in working on this reply here within a week and we can work on it together. Thanks again for your hard work getting this article to where it is now! delldot  &nabla;.  16:12, 18 January 2013 (UTC)


 * No response in the past week so I will go ahead and fail this now. Definitely let me know if you want help working on this at any point in the future!   delldot   &nabla;.  04:01, 28 January 2013 (UTC)