Talk:Progressive music/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 22:55, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * and sometimes results → with it sometimes resulting
 * Electicism, like formalism, → Like formalism, electicism
 * toward style synthesis, or integration → remove comma here
 * but its listeners failed to move with the musicians → too unencyclopedic; try to reword
 * allowing performers limited control over their own content → offering performers limited control over their own material

Jazz

 * its "progressive" features → begin sentence with capital letter
 * autobiography: "They tried → autobiography; "They tried
 * that was made for listening → Remove; I think that's already clear (I mean, we don't eat it, right? )
 * This is meant to contrast with music created for dancing, which is the antithesis of art music.--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:27, 2 November 2016 (UTC)

Pop and rock

 * dramatically accelerated → dramatically increased
 * the "progressive" label arrived → With the arrival of a "progressive" label
 * with standard pop music formula → with the standard pop music formula
 * "progressive" label: lyrics → "progressive label"—lyrics
 * For the rest of this sentence (above), please set a normal comma in place of a ;
 * Before the progressive pop of the late 1960s → Prior to the progressive pop of the late 1960s
 * Beach Boys' 1966 album → Beach Boys' 1966 studio album
 * with their lyrical unity, extended structure, complexity, eclecticism, experimentalism, and influences derived from classical music forms, are largely viewed as beginnings in the progressive rock genre → are largely viewed as beginnings in the progressive rock genre due to their lyrical unity, extended structure, complexity, eclecticism, experimentalism and influences derived from classical music forms.
 * Critic Simon Reynolds → Music critic Simon Reynolds
 * beginning in 1967 → beginning with 1967


 * (before the year 1969) → you can leave the paranthesis out
 * Those proto-prog musicians → The musicians that have approached this genre
 * bands ... into → bands [...] into
 * continued to support → continued to incorporate


 * by the likes of Yes, Genesis, and Emerson, Lake & Palmer → place this at the end of the respective sentence for better flow
 * John Covach: "By John Covach, "by
 * sound. ... What → sound [...] What
 * groups ... was → groups [...]
 * rock in that it balanced → rock by balancing
 * It also drew generously from → It was also notably influenced
 * From the same period → In the same period
 * writes: "the → writes; "the

Electronic

 * DJ/producer → disc jockey and producer

Outcome

 * I've put this for 7 days to allow edits on the article. Very good job! Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:55, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Done!--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:27, 2 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Gladly passing! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:02, 2 November 2016 (UTC)