Talk:Proud of Your Boy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 13:54, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

This is very large, I will try to start reviewing today though. --K. Peake 13:54, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good
 * "for Disney's animated film" → "for Disney's animated film," with the target
 * Done, but linked to "Walt Disney Animation Studios" so readers know we're referring to the company's feature-length animation division.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "The discarded song remained largely" → "After being discarded, the song remained largely"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "The ballad was eventually restored" → "The song was eventually restored"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Lyrically, "Proud of Your Boy" is about" → "Lyrically, it is about"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "about which Ashman was particularly fond." → "with Ashman being particularly fond of it."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:01, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "theorize that the lyricist" → "theorized that the lyricist"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "using "Proud of Your Boy";" → "using the song;"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * ""Proud of Your Boy" was one of the first songs" → "it was one of the first songs"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "In the play Aladdin sings" → "In the musical, Aladdin sings"
 * Revised.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "premiered in the stage adaptation to" → "premiered in the stage adaptation for Aladdin to"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "new addition, since becoming" → "new addition since becoming"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * ""Proud of Your Boy" had already" → "it had already"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Target cult favourite to Cult following
 * Done.


 * "of its demo, considered" → "of the demo, being considered"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2020 (UTC)

Background and writing

 * "Menken also contributed to" → "with Menken also contributing to"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Add release year of the film in brackets
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Remove target on "Arabian Nights"
 * Removed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Aladdin's mother is" → "the character of the same name's mother is" with the target
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "for the better[9][10] and acknowledging" → "for the better,[9][10] while acknowledging"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "strong feelings for the song being" → "strong feelings about the song, being" to avoid confusion
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Ashman had worked with" → "He had worked with"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "agreed the ballad" → "agreed that the ballad"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "with his mother."" → "with his mother"." for consistency
 * "about their relationship querying," → "about the relationship, querying,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Img looks good
 * Thanks.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "Originally intended to occur" → "Originally intended to appear"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Aladdin should be italicised since it is the film being referenced here
 * In this context, the sentence is actually referring discarded solos specifically for the character of Aladdin himself; I've revised the sentence for clarity.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "during which both the mother and song were written out of the movie." → "with both the mother and song being written out of the film."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "deemed unsalvageable as well as" → "deemed unsalvageable, as well as"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "being written out of Aladdin." → "being written out of it."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "of the film to" → "of Aladdin to"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "until "A Whole New World" replaced it." → "prior to the replacement."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "After "Proud of Your Boy"'s omission," → "After the song's omission,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:57, 31 October 2020 (UTC)

Recording and release

 * "to sing in the film by singing" → "to sing in Aladdin by performing"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink sheet music
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Target audio cassette to Cassette tape
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Target voice coach to Voice therapy
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "assured him instead they would" → "assured him they would instead"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "and as of 2019 occasionally" → "and as of 2019, he occasionally"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "he also recorded it" → "he also recorded the song"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * [43][18][44] should be put in numerical order
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Target News 95.7 to CJNI-FM
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "after which it was" → "after which the song was"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "auditions, describing it as" → "auditions; he described it as"
 * Revised.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "It was used by" → "The song was used by"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "as the original audition song" → "as one of the original audition songs"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "approaching the release of an upcoming special edition DVD." → "around the time of an upcoming special edition DVD's release."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "This version was" → "The version was"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "featurette hosted by Musker and co-director Ron Clements," → "featurette that is hosted by Musker and Clements,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "limited to "Hardcore" → "limited to "[h]ardcore"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "for the original Broadway cast recording[52]" → "for Aladdin: Original Broadway Cast Recording,[52]"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

Background

 * "once the project was greenlit," → "once the stage adaptation was green-lit," with the wikilink
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "recognizing it among" → "recognizing the song among"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "Disney Theatrical Productions associate producer" → "Disney Theatrical Productions (DTP) associate producer" per MOS:ACROFIRSTUSE
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Target Broadway to Broadway theatre
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "that it be revised" → "that the script be revised"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "of the show."" → "of the show"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "in the musical having Aladdin" → "in the musical by having Aladdin"
 * "dreams come true."" → "dreams come true"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink reprises
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "president of Disney Theatrical Group," → "president of the Disney Theatrical Group,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "Ashman's “Proud of Your Boy”" → "Ashman's "Proud of Your Boy""
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "in a son."" → "in a son"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "assure his mother" → "assure his mother,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "make you proud"," → "make you proud";"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "the whole show."" → "the whole show"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "shared Jacob's sentiments," → "shared Jacob's sentiment,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "the tune offers" → "the song offers" since "tune" is unencyclopedic
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "suggested performers of the song" → "suggested for performers of the song to"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:12, 3 November 2020 (UTC)

Use in Aladdin

 * "saying "how Aladdin" → "by saying that "how Aladdin"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "both restored from" → "consisting of ones restored from"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "for the show – heard" → "for the show–heard"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "now sings in memory of his late mother[3] and reveals" → "now sings the song in memory of his late mother,[3] revealing"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "make her proud[77][78] as opposed" → "make her proud,[76][77][78] as opposed" with [76] being solely here rather than in its current position at all
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "in the animated film," → "in the film,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * [80] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [20]
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "establishes Aladdin wishes to be" → "establishes that Aladdin wishes to be"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Target Jasmine to Jasmine (Disney character)
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "explained that" → "explained that,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "Despite a second act reprise," → "Despite a reprise in the second act,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Remove target on Jasmine
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "parents proud."" → "parents proud"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 04:19, 10 November 2020 (UTC)

Composition

 * Retitle to Composition and lyrics
 * Changed to "Music and lyrics".--Changedforbetter (talk) 21:58, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Remove wikilink on Walt Disney Music Publishing
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 21:58, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "performed "With" → "performed "[w]ith"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 21:58, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * D major should be in lowercase for the second word
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 21:58, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink octave
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 21:58, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "duration of two minutes and twenty seconds." → "duration of 2:20."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 21:58, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * ScreenCrush should be italicised
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 21:58, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "style of 'A Whole New World',"[47]" → "style of 'A Whole New World'",[47]"
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 21:58, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "two minutes and twenty-nine seconds." → "2:29."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 21:58, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "mother proud."" → "mother proud"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 21:58, 10 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "Identifying it as" → "Identifying "Proud of Your Boy" as"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 17:54, 14 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "lyrics include" → "lyrics include,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 17:54, 14 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "of your boy”,[20] promising to" → "of your boy."[20] The lyrics promise to"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 17:54, 14 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "'screwin’-up times'."" → "'screwin'-up times'"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 17:54, 14 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "wasted time."" → "wasted time"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 17:54, 14 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "her son."" → "her son"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 17:54, 14 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "emotional punch,"" → "emotional punch","
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 17:54, 14 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "we are."" → "we are"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 17:54, 14 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "of you."" → "of you"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 17:54, 14 November 2020 (UTC)

Reception

 * "Heather Phares of AllMusic described" → "Phares described"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:57, 15 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "Filmtracks.com offered a" → "The staff of Filmtracks.com offered a"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:57, 15 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "although the critic said" → "while saying"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:57, 15 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "a degree,"" → "a degree","
 * "due to its availability" → "due to the availability"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:57, 15 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "the critic described" → "the staff described"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:57, 15 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "Comingsoon.net's Scott Chitwood found" → "ComingSoon.net's Scott Chitwood found"
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:57, 15 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "about its creators'" → "about the creators'"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:57, 15 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "Nerdist contributor Amy Ratcliffe wrote that" → "Ratcliffe wrote that"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:57, 15 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "emotional jab."" → "emotional jab"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:57, 15 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "among the disc's bonus content," → "among the DVD's bonus content,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 00:57, 15 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Target cult favourite to Cult following
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:21, 18 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Why is the cult favourite mentioned here when the reviews like the DVD one that are listed earlier are from later time periods? Shouldn't it be earlier in the section instead???
 * I've moved this down to the "impact" section instead.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:21, 18 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "The Mississauga News reported" → "The staff of The Mississauga News reported"
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:21, 18 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Remove wikilink on The Music Behind the Magic
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:21, 18 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "wonderful effect."" → "wonderful effect"."
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:21, 18 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "new addition to the musical for" → "new addition for"
 * Revised.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:21, 18 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "New York Theatre Guide described it" → "The staff of New York Theatre Guide described it"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:21, 18 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "reviewed actor Graeme Isaako's" → "reviewed Isaako's"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:21, 18 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "in the film."" → "in the film"."
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:21, 18 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Remove UHCL The Signal per WP:RSSM
 * Removed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "in love."" → "in love"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "also believes the song" → "also stated that the song"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "News & Reviews Tessa Marguerite Outland" → "The News & Reviews Tessa Marguerite Outland"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Target LEO Weekly to Louisville Eccentric Observer
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "writing for the same publication," → "for the same publication,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Deadline Hollywood
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "Variety said" → "The staff of Variety said,"" with the target
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "“Disney’s Aladdin” has" → "'Disney's Aladdin' has"
 * Revised.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "Vulture.com's Jesse Green was" → "Vulture's Jesse Green was" with the target per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "and found its reprise" → "and finding the song's reprise"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Remove wikilink on Los Angeles Times
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * Remove The Spectrum per WP:RSSM
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "Although C. Edwards of Cartoon Brew agreed that "It’s" → "While C. Edwards of Cartoon Brew wrote that, "It's"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:14, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "a break."" → "a break"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:13, 22 November 2020 (UTC)

Live performances and covers

 * Img looks good
 * "of Disney Theatrical Productions." → "of DTP that same year."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Auditorium Theatre
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "own parents, using" → "own parents, with him using"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "In 2019, actor Clinton Greenspan" → "In 2019, Greenspan"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink music video
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Scott Chitwood of Comingsoon.net described" → "Chitwood described"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Animation World Network should not be italicised
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "a fan of the artist," → "a fan of Aiken,"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "AllMusic's Heather Phares described as" → "Phares described as"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Target Buena Vista Pictures to Buena Vista (brand)
 * Fixed.


 * Target video montage to Montage (filmmaking)
 * Done.


 * "which is considered" → "the latter of which is considered"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Target single to Single (music)
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Target ABC to ABC Signature
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "the artist's rendition" → "the singer's rendition"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "but remains" → "while remaining"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 20:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)

Impact

 * There has been some edit warring circulated around this section over the past month or so, though this edit showed more of a compromise for both sides
 * "in which it became" → "with it becoming"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Target 680 News to CFTR (AM)
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove wikilink on BroadwayWorld
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "among 20 best" → "among the 20 best"
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Actor Telly Leung said the song" → "Leung said the song"
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "stage production."" → "stage production"."
 * Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Add release year of the adaption in brackets
 * Added.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "of Vulture.com joked that" → "of Vulture joked that"
 * Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 18:39, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * but an issue I noticed throughout was that you did overlink a lot of things. --K. Peake 12:21, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
 * K. Peake Hi there. Firstly, I'd like to thank you for taking the time to review my article so diligently and quickly. I understand that, typically, the turnaround for responding to reviews is 7 days/a week. However, I wanted to advise you that I've run into some home computer issues that may result in my response taking a little bit longer.  I hope you don't mind if I ask for another week, at the most, before passing judgement. Thanks!--Changedforbetter (talk) 02:55, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
 * No of course I don't mind; the response timeframe is what is aimed for, though it is not necessary and if you have issues then I am definitely willing to allow longer to respond. Mention me again when you have covered everything though! --K. Peake 08:42, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I am glad to see that you have completed the sections up to reception, how long do you think it will take you to get through the rest hopefully? --K. Peake 12:04, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately I will have to ❌ this, as I have allowed a good amount longer than an extra week for you to fix the issues but there are still a number of sections left to cover; I waited until now to form this verdict because today marks the end of the month. --K. Peake 08:18, 30 November 2020 (UTC)
 * K. Peake Hi there, I completely understand and wouldn't hold your decision to "fail" against you at all; you've been more than patient and accommodating. Unfortunately, my real-life career and computer various issues have gotten in the way of myself editing the article as consistently as I would have liked, for which I do apologize.  Hopefully I'll be able to resubmit the article for GA once life has regulated a little.  All the best! :-)--Changedforbetter (talk) 03:04, 1 December 2020 (UTC)