Talk:Psycho (Red Velvet song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 06:46, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

Coming soon, maybe later today even --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:46, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

✅ Resolved

Infobox and lead
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 * Are you sure the language should be in here? If so, target to Korean language.
 * Target Digital download to Music download
 * No source for the recorded date; either add one in the body or remove it
 * Target R&B to Contemporary R&B
 * "is a song recorded by" → "is a song by"
 * Wikilink girl group to itself
 * "for their first compilation album The ReVe Festival: Finale, which" → "from their first compilation album, The ReVe Festival: Finale (2019), which"
 * "Cazzi Opeia and EJAE" → "Cazzi Opeia, and EJAE"
 * "Record producer" doesn't need the capitalisation
 * Target Korean to Korean language
 * Target R&B to Contemporary R&B
 * ""Psycho" is about how one is in a "strange" relationship" → "it is about how two are in a strange relationship" since this is not directly quoted in the body
 * "Along with its accompanying" → "Along with the accompanying" since we know the video is for the song from the accompanying term being used
 * Target digitally to Music download
 * Release info looks good but this belongs between the album release info and that about composing
 * Mention the label(s) the release was through
 * Target music critics to Music journalism
 * "delivery over its" → "delivery over the"
 * "Though it was a "year-end" release" → "Despite being a "year-end" release"
 * "several year-end critics lists" → "several year-end lists by critics"
 * Wikilink K-pop to itself
 * "previous Korean releases in 2019, "Psycho" attained bigger commercial success" → "previous Korean releases that year, the song was more successful commercially" as the current wording isn't very encyclopedic
 * "It was also an international success" → "The song was also an international success"
 * "on Billboard's World Digital Songs chart" → "on the Billboard's World Digital Songs chart"
 * "while being their first chart entry" → "and their first entry"
 * "tying them with" → "tying Red Velvet with" as you haven't said who they are specifically for a while

Background and release
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 * "During the group's appearance" → "During Red Velvet's appearance"
 * "on July 2019" → "in July 2019"
 * "that their upcoming plans for 2019" → "that their upcoming plans for that year"
 * "namely Day 2 (which was later released on August 20, 2019) and Finale." → "namely Day 2 and Finale, the former of which was later was released on August 20, 2019."
 * "the group's third concert La Rouge" → "the group's third concert, La Rouge,"
 * Wikilink SM Entertainment
 * "midnight of December 12, 2019, along" → "midnight of that year's December 12, along" since you have stated 2019 soon before but can't say "of" too close
 * "the group's "music festival" trilogy" → "Red Velvet's "music festival" trilogy"
 * Wikilink Instagram to itself
 * "was uploaded on" → "was uploaded to"
 * Mention the channel is a YouTube one
 * "the official video being released a day later" → "the music video being released the following day"
 * Write out the info from Release history in prose here

Composition
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 * On the audio file's text, wikilink future bass to itself
 * "that sees Red Velvet" → "that includes Red Velvet"
 * Add refs that are invoked in this section after the file's text too
 * "American producer" → "American record producer" with no wikilink(s)
 * "EJAE and frequently-collaborated singer-songwriter Cazzi Opeia" → "EJAE, and frequently collaborator Cazzi Opeia" since this is enough intro
 * "about a breakup which" → "about a breakup where"
 * "to come up with the actual song" → "to come up with the song"
 * "acknowledge the group's duality" → "acknowledged Red Velvet's duality"
 * "by Opeia (which eventually leaked onto the Internet weeks before the song's release)" → "by Opeia that eventually leaked on the Internet weeks before the song's release"
 * Target Korean to Korean language
 * "producer Druski and Yoo Young-jin, the latter whom" → "producer Druski, and Yoo Young-jin, the latter of which"
 * "Musically, the song was" → "Musically, "Psycho" was"
 * Target R&B-pop to Contemporary R&B
 * Target classical to Classical music
 * Target trap to Trap music
 * "which marked the song as their seventh single" → "which made the song the group's seventh single"
 * "which combines with" → "which is combined with"
 * "slightly different version for the song" → "slightly different version of the song"
 * "having a string melody while" → "including a string melody, while"
 * "gonna be alright."[7]" → "gonna be alright".[7]"

Music video
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 * This section belongs below Accolades; that section and others will be requested for switching by me further on in this review.

Background
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 * "video director O whom previously worked" → "video director O, whom previously worked"
 * "and its parental album release" → "and Finale's release"
 * "the music video was accompanied" → "the visual was accompanied"
 * "Choreography for the song" → "Choreography for the video"
 * Sure a different introduction can't be given of Bailey Sok then a "then 15-year old" or just keep the Skeleton Crew info solely?

Synopsis and reception
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 * "The video opens with member Irene" → "The music video opens with Irene" since this is a new sub-section and we already know who Irene is
 * "where other members are seen" → "where other members of Red Velvet are seen"
 * "different scene sets: member Seulgi" → "different scene sets, with Seulgi"
 * "being overwatched by member Wendy" → "being overwatched by Wendy"
 * Target Wendy to Wendy (singer)
 * "moves on to member Joy sitting" → "moves on to Joy sitting"
 * "first verse where Irene is seen" → "first verse alongside Irene being seen"
 * "where member Yeri is dancing" → "where Yeri is dancing"
 * "as she continues dancing" → "as the former continues dancing"
 * "Joy continues to lead a then-standing near a seemingly behind the stage set Wendy" what does this mean, I'm confused?
 * "in a different room where Irene" → "in a different room, where Irene"
 * "in the previous room with Joy" → "in the previous room, with Joy"
 * "apartment set (which is the place where Wendy is seen singing her parts) with" → "apartment set, in which Wendy is seen singing her parts, with"
 * "Alfred Hitchcock’s Psycho."" → "Alfred Hitchcock's Psycho"."
 * "It is followed by" → "The scene is followed by"
 * "turns multiple" specify this?
 * "to the scene where all members" → "to the scene in which all members"
 * "then ends with Irene" → "before ending with Irene"
 * "cuts to the group's name and album logo" → "cuts to the name Red Velvet and the album logo" since we haven't named the group for a while by now
 * "Following the music video release" → "Following the music video's release"
 * "praising the music video being" → "praising the video for being"
 * "Write Kelly Sipko from" → "Writer Kelly Sipko from"
 * Remove Refinery29 info due to the new order; just write Morin instead for identification
 * "noted the music video's" → "noted the visual's"
 * "then released a performance video" → "later released a performance video"
 * "and later released a live performance" → "and also released a live performance"
 * "on January 13, 2020" → "on January 13 of that year"
 * "the music video for "Psycho" hit" → "the music video for the track reached"
 * "which is also the group's fastest video" → "which is the group's fastest video"
 * "achieving in just" → "achieving it in"

Tour and live performances
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 * This section belongs below Commercial performance in the new order
 * Retitle to Live performances, since tour performances are the same thing, essentially.
 * "comparing to their previous promotion" → "comparing to Red Velvet's previous promotion"
 * "Red Velvet gave their first live performance for" → "The group delivered their first live performance of"
 * "limited participation for the group's" → "limited participation for their"
 * [18][16] put in numerical order
 * "Red Velvet was then confirmed" → "Red Velvet were then confirmed"
 * "on December 25, scheduled" → "on December 25 of that year, scheduled"
 * Remove target on Wendy
 * "where they also won their fifth" → "where Red Velvet also won their fifth"

Commercial performance
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 * This section belongs in-between Music video and Live performances in the new order
 * "Soon after, the song achieved" → "Shortly later, the song achieved"
 * "the first girl group (second overall for idol group) to achieve" → "the first girl group and second overall for idol group to achieve"
 * "On the final week of December 2019" → "In the final week of December 2019"
 * Identify the Gaon chart as being from South Korea
 * Remove target on rapper as that is very obvious/pointless
 * "first top-two entry" → "first top 2 entry" since MOS:NUMBERS suggests consistency with comparative values
 * "and the first to do so since" → "and their first since"
 * "while becoming their fifth No. 2 entry and their twelfth top-ten entry overall, respectively" → "while becoming their 5th and 12th number 2 and top 10 entry overall, respectively"
 * "issue of Gaon Monthly Digital Chart" → "issue of the Gaon Monthly Digital Chart"
 * "In addition, the song" → "In addition, it"
 * "It also debuted at number nine" → "The song also debuted at number nine"
 * "on the week of" → "for the issue date of"
 * The last sentence of the first para needs a ref invoked
 * "debuted at number one on the" → "debuted atop the"
 * Remove target on Billboard, but target World Digital Songs to World Digital Song Sales
 * "chart-topper following their 2018 single" → "chart-topper, following their 2018 single"
 * "to achieve such remark" → "to do this"
 * "became their sixteenth top-ten entry" → "became their 16th top 10 entry"
 * Wikilink 2NE1 to itself
 * "the song became their second entry" → "the song became Red Velvet's 2nd entry"
 * Target the New Zealand chart to an appropriate wiki page
 * "debuting at number ten" → "entering at number 10"
 * Target the UK Singles Downloads Chart to an appropriate page
 * "making it their first song" → "becoming their first song"

Critical reception
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 * This section belongs directly below Composition in the new order
 * The ratings box is not needed unless you can add more ratings than what is currently in it
 * "Following its initial release, "Psycho" has received positive reviews" → ""Psycho" was met with positive reviews"
 * Target music critics to Music journalism
 * "called the track" → "viewed the track as"
 * "with 3 stars and a half out of 5" → "with three stars and a half out of five"
 * "also compliments the song" → "also complimented the song"
 * "driving the track" → "driving it"
 * Refinery29 should not be italicised
 * "giving the song a perfect score out of ten" → "giving it a perfect score out of 10"
 * "and said the group" → "and said Red Velvet"
 * "made its appearance in several publication's year-end list" → "appeared in several publication's year-end lists"
 * Wikilink K-pop to itself
 * "ranked the song number eighteen" → "ranked the song at number 18"
 * Target pop to Pop music
 * Should CelebMix be italicised?
 * Mention that the number six rank is on the K-pop year-end list, since otherwise readers are confused.
 * "track to sing in the shower."" → "track to sing in the shower"."
 * The refs should not be sortable in the table
 * BuzzFeed should not be italicised
 * Reliable sources/Perennial sources writes against Reddit, so remove those rankings

Accolades
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 * This should remain directly under Critical reception in the new order.
 * Retitle to Awards
 * "Despite the group not attending" → "Despite Red Velvet not attending"
 * "managed to achieved a total of nine music show trophies as of" → "managed to achieve a total of nine music show trophies by"
 * "Not only did the song become Red Velvet's" → "Not only did the song become the group's"
 * "title track (tying with their 2017 single "Rookie"), it was their" → "title track, tying with their 2017 single "Rookie", it was also their"
 * Wikilinks for the three channels named
 * "It also achieved two consecutive" → "The song also achieved two consecutive"
 * "due to the song's massive success on its" → "due to its massive success on the"
 * Refs should not be sortable in the tables

Personnel
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 * Remove target on Red Velvet
 * Studios have been listed here; are you sure you shouldn't state "Mixed at SM Concert Studio Hall" or something like that on multiple occasions?
 * If doing the second point, retitle this section to Credits and personnel

Charts
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 * Separate these two sub-sections by placing them accross from each other using a col; take "All Mine for example.

Weekly chart
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 * Retitle to Weekly charts as there's more than one
 * Target World Digital Songs to World Digital Song Sales

Monthly chart
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 * Retitle to Monthly charts for consistency
 * Change the header to solely listing 2020 in brackets
 * Remove the target on Gaon Digital Chart

Release history
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 * Region → Country
 * Format → Format(s)
 * List out the formats separately using * instead of the hlist that is banned now
 * Target Digital download to Music download
 * Refs should be here and centred too
 * Dreamus is mentioned in the infobox labels but not here; either add it here or remove it from the box

Final comments and verdict
for now as it's a well-researched, but needs quite a few fixes before reaching GA-status. One suggestion I have would be to add an image, since this article has a lot of information so a relevant one should be easy to find for inclusion. --Kyle Peake (talk) 09:16, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
 * ❌ I hate to do this but it's been over a week and the nominator has only added a few of the proposed edits, plus they are barely active at WP and the [unreliable source?] template has been planked on two citations of this page. --Kyle Peake (talk) 04:32, 3 June 2020 (UTC)