Talk:Pubal/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:41, 19 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments That's all I have. I can't check any of the references however, so I've asked for a second opinion on those Polish language sources. On hold. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 09:52, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "circa[a] 24 July 2005) " no need for that footnote to be inserted there in the lead. Either put it in the infobox or just explain it in the article.
 * No need for references in lead when everything there should be covered (in more detail) in the main part of the article, so the refs can go there.
 * " his continuous escapes " not continuous, numerous perhaps.
 * "his entire life" entire isn't needed.
 * I think the Name section can be integrated into the History section after the discussion over his discovery. Otherwise it disrupts the chronology.
 * "any name as names " is repetitive.
 * "On the 26th of July, 2005," -> "On 26 July 2005,"
 * " charcoal burning workers" why not just "charcoal burners"?
 * " a devastating flood" POV, just "a flood" and perhaps describe objectively what damage that flood did.
 * "His age was said to be no more than two days " -> "He was said to be no more than two days old..."
 * "leftovers" is an odd way of putting it, remnants perhaps?
 * "with his wife " and his wife.
 * "milk through a" milk with a
 * "but it was not long before he lost interest in representatives" ->" but he soon lost interest in rejoining"?
 * "at one point literally interrupting " no need for literally.
 * "completely tame.[9][7]" ref order.
 * "carefully orchestrated in a way that could " -> "managed to"
 * "vicinity Pubal was relatively quickly seen on his own again and trying to find humans"-> "vicinity, Pubal was relatively quickly seen on his own again, trying to find humans"
 * "to start finding his own sources of food that were not reliant on humans." no need for "that were not reliant on humans".
 * "250 kilograms" convert to pounds.
 * "he might end up hurting someone when frightened" -> "he could harm someone"
 * "for good." permanently.
 * " has passed away" died.
 * " the same documentary received " it received. And what accolades?
 * I'll close the review on 30 April if we don't make progress. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 09:38, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , thank you for the review. I've now made all the suggested changes. Cheers! --Samotny Wędrowiec (talk) 20:30, 28 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Ok, I've spot-checked some of the online refs via Google Translate and I'm happy to AGF that the rest are fine, so I'm promoting. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 07:51, 30 April 2020 (UTC)