Talk:Pura Cruz

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 * You should include your sources in the actual paragraphs so that the readers know where you got the information. Support your information with reliable links
 * The way you wrote made it seem too personal or as if you got it from her website rather than a secondary source. Work on how you phrase things so it doesn't seem as though you got this information from something she wrote abut herself. It just needs to seem more impersonal, but the information provided is great and gives the reader a good idea about her as an artist and her inspirations.(this could be fixed if you cite where the information came from in the paragraphs and not just on the reference page)
 * You do not need so many art works, and instead of listing that many you could instead describe them, and even write about the artists inspiration if it is in any articles or papers about her.
 * Organization of information in the bio could be improved. Maybe just fix the transitions from one topic to the next
 * Some of the sentences looked a bit long, so maybe shorten them or turn them into two sentences instead.
 * None of your links work so you might want to fix that.