Talk:Pure (Miller novel)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Maclean25 (talk · contribs) 00:38, 15 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Good article review (see What is a good article? for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Three images: File:Andrew Miller - Pure.jpg tagged as fair use; File:Saints Innocents 1550 Hoffbauer NoFrame.jpg & File:Goya - Caprichos (43) - Sleep of Reason.jpg both Commons-hosted and tagged public domain.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Comments/Questions
 * Firstly, thanks for the review!
 * Three images: File:Andrew Miller - Pure.jpg tagged as fair use; File:Saints Innocents 1550 Hoffbauer NoFrame.jpg & File:Goya - Caprichos (43) - Sleep of Reason.jpg both Commons-hosted and tagged public domain.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Comments/Questions
 * Firstly, thanks for the review!
 * Firstly, thanks for the review!


 * 1a. In Plot, "overflow into the neighbouring houses." - I'm unclear on this. How does a cemetery overflow?
 * Clarified to The cemetery has been in use for many years but, given the number of people buried in such a small area, the bodies are no longer decomposing properly. They have begun to overflow and fall into the neighbouring houses as greater excavations take place and basement walls are weakened.


 * 1a. In Plot, "and that things might not appear to be as simple as he first imagined." - this is a plot teaser. Just provide a plot summary, do not be concerned with spoilers (Spoiler).
 * Amended to He finds resistance from all sides, notably Ziguette who strikes Baratte during his sleep in opposition to his work.


 * 2b. In Development, "Miller was "taken by the theatricality" of it..." - this quote should have a citation attached to it.
 * This was supported by the guardian interview against the following sentence. I've stuck it here also.


 * 2b. In Reception, there seems to be difference between a quote and its source material:
 * Article "Miller intimately and pacily imagines..."
 * Source "Miller intimately imagines..."
 * This is actually as originally published, but as I couldn't find "pacily" in my OED I emailed them and they corrected! I forgot to update in the article also. Now done.


 * 3b/4. In Awards and nominations, the quote from McCrum is going too far. It is a harsh criticism of someone else's judgment and, by extension, an award. It is ok to say that the absence of several books (including Pure) from the long-list led McCrum to criticize the editorial judgment of the judges, but using an extended harshly worded quote is being overly defensive (POV) and unfocused (too much emphasis).
 * Agreed and removed.


 * 1b. The lead can be expanded. It should be a stand-alone summary of the article but there doesn't appear to be anything regarding the Development or Reception sections. It could also give a more clear explanation of the plot. Also, the cites in the lead are unnecessary because that info is already cited properly in the article's body.
 * Shall work on this today... (though would welcome some help!)


 * I made a couple edits regarding MOS:LQ. Full sentence quotes retain their punctuation within the quote marks.
 * Thanks again!  Nik the  stoned  09:57, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Ok, the article meets the GA criteria now. I have assessed it GA-class. maclean (talk) 22:52, 27 June 2012 (UTC)