Talk:Pursuit predation

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A couple quick things that I saw: Group pursuers Individual pursuers Evolution for an ecological basis
 * 1st sentence was awkward, not exactly sure how to change this
 * Examples of vertebrates not really showing individual differences except for lions
 * Invertebrate, need a lot more information than just the listing of the species
 * Invertebrates: The sentence on "decisions" is awkward you use a lot of prepositional phrases, consider reworking
 * The male vs. female dragonfly commentary is very random and does not flow with the piece, consider removing
 * What about dilution factor in minimizing predation risk?

Other than that I like the thoroughness of your research and felt that your article was non-biased and informative. There were a few instances here and there where your sentence structure obstructed your clarity so be aware of that and your audience. I also inserted comments where I felt citations were needed. Other than that good job! Rhumke (talk) 23:43, 7 November 2015 (UTC)

I would recommend finding a way to link your article to the Ambush Predation article, perhaps as a contrasting form of predation. I know it isn't required, but having a citation in the 1st paragraph following the definition of pursuit predation might be nice. Another note regarding general formatting: I might place the "Strategy" section after the "Evolution" section, it would make sense temporally, as well as a nice transition into the "Group" vs. "Individual" sections. waltm170 20:40, 31 October 2015 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Walter Moczygemba (talk • contribs)

A few of the sections are unfinished, but I will assume that the users who added them have a plan to complete those sections and ignore it. In addition, you mentioned that "the multitude of predators allow the group to increase the number of prey capture by methods only possible via a group", however I was under the impression that working as a group tends to allow the predators to increase the size of prey captured, rather than the number of prey captured. I would also agree with the above comment - it might make more sense to discuss evolution before strategies (since strategies are highly dependent on the evolutionary incentives). I also think that the discussion of antipredatory adaptation to pursuit predation overlaps heavily with the "evolution as a countermeasure" subsection - perhaps the two could be merged, expanding that subsection in the process? Dyz30 (talk) 05:46, 4 November 2015 (UTC)

This is an interesting topic, and you already have a lot of good information. I know that you have more content to add, so for now I only have a few suggestions. First, I noticed that some of the sentences are pretty long and at times seem a bit redundant. I think that you should reread them and take out a few words in order to convey your ideas clearly. Also I noticed a few typos like "flys'" and "flees." In the section about dragonflies, you put "are are," so just make sure that you proofread before saving your edits. Another suggestion is to find a way to transition from talking about one animal to the next. I think that it would sound better and make more sense if there is a transition because right now it just seems to go from one to another without much of a clear line between them. I really like how you have headings and subheadings because they make your article organized and easier to follow. I think that under your subheadings like vertebrates and invertebrates it would be better to maybe mention what the animals in these categories have in common or their importance before you jump straight into details about different animals. I'm assuming that you are going to include more examples under the Individual Pursuers: Invertebrates section rather than just talk about dragonflies. Besides a little bit of editing, I don't think that you need to change much. It looks good so far! AlexisCarter267 (talk) 00:13, 5 November 2015 (UTC)

You guys have shown that you have done a lot of research for your page and the information that you all provide is clear and concise. I would recommend probably adding more information for the invertebrate section because it seems to lack as much info as it could have for such a diverse group of animals. I also agree with Alexis that it might help to have smoother transitions in your article and to double check your grammar because I saw a few mistakes that I was hesitant on editing myself. Jas148 (talk) 16:44, 5 November 2015 (UTC)

I would try to add to the Anti-Predator Adaptation Section, at least providing another main example of adaptation to pursuit predation. I might also rename the Confusion Effect and Prey Oddity since Confusion effect is the adaptation itself, whereas prey oddity was something experimentally induced waltm170 18:31, 5 November 2015 (UTC)

I would suggest maybe making the group/individual sections subheadings under strategy since they seem to be examples of different pursuit predation strategies that you described in the strategy section. There is a lot of good information so far but I think better transitions are necessary so your article doesn't come across as a list of facts. Maybe add subheadings with the animal names? Or group them together in a logical way before you start going into detail on each example. I think that would help your sentences flow a little better. But good work so far! Tanioneill (talk) 02:24, 6 November 2015 (UTC)

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