Talk:Q35 (New York City bus)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 18:18, 9 April 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use ✅,, , ❌, , or , followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠  18:18, 9 April 2020 (UTC)

As this the first of the reviewee's articles that I have reviewed, they should note that I am a grammar pendant and will nitpick in the interest of prose quality. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  18:18, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , thanks for taking this up. Kew Gardens 613 is offline till Saturday as he is celebrating Passover and Shabbat. I'll address some of these comments. epicgenius (talk) 19:47, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Oh, good to know. I'll make sure to ping you for each Kew Gardens article I review in the future. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  19:49, 9 April 2020 (UTC)

Prose
There seems to be some missing pieces in "History". Specific examples I can think of are "Why were the buses so dirty in the 1970s?" and "Why, and for how long, was the City nationalizing the transport companies?"
 * Well, to your specific examples, the 1970s were a very dark time for NYC (see 1975 New York City fiscal crisis). Privatizing transport would've been a good idea at the time. In general, I don't think these are specific to the Q35, which is probably why the original editors did not add these details. epicgenius (talk) 19:52, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * They aren't, but they are important context. I'm sure the sources at least mention those circumstances. "What" and "why" are the two faces of the mint we writers deal in. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  22:27, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I fixed the first one. Maybe Kew Gardens can tackle the other when he comes back. epicgenius (talk) 23:13, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I'll leave this On Hold until that time. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  00:30, 10 April 2020 (UTC)


 * (NYCDOT) First and only time this is used.
 * ✅ Reworded.
 * Due to franchise restrictions with the city Within the city?
 * With the city government. epicgenius (talk) 19:52, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Following MTA takeover in 2006 the MTA takeover
 * where several bus routes including the B41 terminate Place commas before "where" and after "B41".
 * before entering the Marine Parkway–Gil Hodges Memorial Bridge [...] just north of the Rockaway Park–Beach 116th Street [...] in front of Neponsit Beach Hospital. Overlinked
 * buses turn west then turn north Remove the second "turn".
 * Move the image in "Creation" to the right.
 * "Deathmobiles" was a reference to Mayor Koch's use of a blue Chrysler Newport that he described as a "deathmobile".[59][60] Irrelevant, remove.
 * I relocated this into a footnote, because "deathmobiles" was used in the previous sentence. epicgenius (talk) 19:52, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Good enough a compromise for me. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  22:27, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Move the image in "Creation" to the right.
 * "Deathmobiles" was a reference to Mayor Koch's use of a blue Chrysler Newport that he described as a "deathmobile".[59][60] Irrelevant, remove.
 * I relocated this into a footnote, because "deathmobiles" was used in the previous sentence. epicgenius (talk) 19:52, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Good enough a compromise for me. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  22:27, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Good enough a compromise for me. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  22:27, 9 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Take 2
 * Following the MTA takeover in 2006, several stops in Brooklyn were eliminated to streamline service. Essentially, the Q35 makes limited-stops in Brooklyn, while operating as a local in Queens. I'd combine this with the last sentence of the lead's first paragraph.

GA progress
Due to Passover, I won't be able to do any editing from tonight until Thursday evening at the earliest. I am still committed to addressing your concerns with the article. Thanks for your patience and stay safe. Thanks so much for helping out!--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 23:11, 14 April 2020 (UTC)