Talk:Röyksopp/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk) 21:54, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: none found.

Linkrot: Two found and tagged. Jezhotwells (talk) 21:59, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

Checking against GA criteria

 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * The two met when Berge was 12 and Brundtland was 13, and the two began playing music together due to a shared interest in electronic music. Try rephrasing to avoid repetitious use of "music".
 * Many of Röyksopp's singles soon were licensed for movie appearances. A little vague and could be better phrased. ✅
 * The song is currently available for free streaming on the band's website. Time based, better to just mention release date.
 * The band later released "Tricky Tricky" stems as part of a remix competition and the winning entries were released on October 27, 2009. Is "Tricky Tricky" another song from the album, please make clear. ✅
 * Still not clear, is Tricky Tricky another album?
 * ' 'Junior was a success around the world. The album peaked at number one in Norway, the band's third consecutive album to do so.[15] The album also peaked at number 21 on the UK Albums Chart.[16] In addition, the album also charted on many Billboard charts, including the Billboard 200 – the first Röyksopp album to do so – where it peaked at number 126.[27] The album also peaked at number 4 on the Top Electronic Albums chart and number 3 on the Top Heatseekers chart'' Six uses of "album" in a few lines. Please rephrase.
 * There, the album peaked at number one, the band's fourth consecutive album to do so. Again.
 *  The duo has also expressed their enjoyment for remixing songs. Poor phrasing.
 * ''Whenever people approach us for a remix it's very nice; being approached by Roots Manuva, The Streets, and even Peter Gabriel is quite fun."[5] The band was also approached by Britney Spears for a remix, but had to turn down the offer due to scheduling conflicts.[" Repetitious use of "approach".
 * In addition to sales success, Röyksopp has managed to garner good critical reception from many music critics. Clunky, rephrase.
 * Please copy-edit through. Enlist the help of an editor experienced in good plain English. ✅
 * Remove any links to other articles that are used in the text from the See also section.
 * The popularity of the duo's music was boosted by several graphically experimental music videos, many of which were put into heavy rotation by MTV.[18] The music video for "Remind Me", featuring an infographic-styled video by French company H5, won the 2002 MTV Europe Music Award for best music video.[19][11] In this same event the duo was nominated in three more categories: "Best Nordic Act", "Best New Artist" and "Best Dance Act", but only won the award for best video.[19] The duo performed the song "Poor Leno" at the event.[20] One year later the duo received a nomination for "Best Group" at the Brit Awards.[21], excessive use of "the duo"
 * This still needs a thorough copy-edit, eliminating sudden changes of tense, and reworking stilted prose. Above all good plain English should be employed.
 * The lead still needs to summarise the whole article, please read WP:LEAD.❌
 * Phrases such as Röyksopp is known for their elaborate ... need rewriting in plain English. It seems that the copy-editing was much help after all. The sentence structure is poor, sentences are almost randomly thrown together.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * Two dead links found and tagged.
 * Other sources look reliable enough.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * In addition to sales success, Röyksopp has managed to garner good critical reception from many music critics. Does everybody love them?
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * See above, has there been no negative coverage?
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * OK, there is a lot to fix. If it can be done in seven days, it will pass, otherwise it will fail. On Hold. Jezhotwells (talk) 22:18, 23 October 2010 (UTC)
 * The article still needs thorough copy-editing, you may be able to get help either at some of the projects or the WP:Guild of copyeditors. Remains on hold. Jezhotwells (talk) 20:43, 24 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Just the lead, which still does not fully summarise the article. Jezhotwells (talk) 12:48, 29 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, it is past seven days and the artcile still does not satisfy the reasonably good prose criterion, also the lead needs to fully summarise the article. I shall not be listing this at this time. Jezhotwells (talk) 14:06, 1 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Just the lead, which still does not fully summarise the article. Jezhotwells (talk) 12:48, 29 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, it is past seven days and the artcile still does not satisfy the reasonably good prose criterion, also the lead needs to fully summarise the article. I shall not be listing this at this time. Jezhotwells (talk) 14:06, 1 November 2010 (UTC)


 * OK, I've started work on the page to get it up to snuff!--Gen. Quon (talk) 03:01, 24 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Alright, I believe I've fixed all of the prose problems you've pointed out. I've fixed the two instances of linkrot and added new citations, and I've added a section under critical reception about negative comments (but believe me, it was hard to find some. The critics love them). I've also combed through and fixed/tweaked some more prose stuff. What do you think now?--Gen. Quon (talk) 17:42, 24 October 2010 (UTC)
 * I believe everything has been fixed now, except the lead and the copy/editing. I applied for help on the Copy Editors/Requests page, so hopefully, they'll help out. I'll start to work on the lead.--Gen. Quon (talk) 23:05, 24 October 2010 (UTC)