Talk:R2K: The Concert/Archive 1

Copyedit request
Hey, doing my thing as usual here:
 * Announced in January, and held during two consecutive nights in April 2000 at the Araneta Coliseum in Quezon City, the concerts were part of Velasquez's campaign in support of her tenth studio album R2K (1999). Looking at the concert synopsis, was it just the same concert being performed twice? The subject seems to be about one concert rather an actual series. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Actually your right, I was ambivalent on whether to treat as one or not. Should just be treated as singlar then.
 * ✅. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 01:34, 9 June 2022 (UTC)


 * [T]he concerts were her first performance in a large-scale indoor arena production. Similar to above. Should this be treated in the singular? — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Agree with above to be treated as singular.
 * ✅. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 01:34, 9 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Concert synopsis: This seems too detailed, especially with all the costume changes. Unless there's something notable about costume pieces, I think those can be omitted. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I've made a few edits to remove the costume changes that are not necessary. But feel free to edit as you find fit.
 * ✅. I removed most of them. The airborne suspension seems fine to mention, so I left the costume talked about there in. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 01:34, 9 June 2022 (UTC)


 * In retrospect, Elvin Luciano from CNN Philippines called it "the most iconic image" of the singer, while Lo termed it a "decidedly daring or risky action". Emphasis added, wikilink removed. I'm not sure the emphasised phrase is being used correctly; what are you trying to convey by saying in retrospect? It means to look backwards (at a past event). — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I meant it to be a reference to the CNN source as being retrospective, since this was a description years later looking back at her career. But I agree this can be removed so it doesn't sound ambiguous, as I have also added a separate review by Lo.
 * ✅. I switched the two around and added a time phrase, which should get the point across clearly. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 01:34, 9 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Cited by a foreign magazine as one of the best shows in Asia in the last 25 years [...] This is closely paraphrased from the synopsis of the source video. Which magazine? As it is it comes off as promotional. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I could not find the actual source, I do know it was from an article of New Strait Times, so we can probably just remove then if it comes off being promotional.
 * ✅. I removed it as I'm not sure what value the sentence had encyclopedically. Interested readers will see it if they click on the reference, anyway. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 01:34, 9 June 2022 (UTC)


 * It is not representative of all concerts for the duration shows. What's a duration show? — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 01:34, 9 June 2022 (UTC)
 * My bad, I meant to write duration of the shows.
 * ✅. I removed it as the previous sentence is enough. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 17:14, 10 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Velasquez commissioned Rajo Laurel [...] Wikilink removed. — Tenryuu 🐲  ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * All good, this is a miss on my part, I should have checked and opened the actual wikilink. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Pseud 14 (talk • contribs)

Looking forward to your answers. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 19:49, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * thanks for your detailed review and copyedits. I have addressed the above points listed. Let me know if there's something that needs clarification. Thank you! Pseud 14 (talk) 20:22, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I've addressed most of the points, though I added a new question as I just noticed it. — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 01:34, 9 June 2022 (UTC)
 * thank you for the additional edits! The synopsis def reads so much better . I have provided my response to the additional question as well. Pseud 14 (talk) 02:30, 9 June 2022 (UTC)
 * All right, I think that's everything! — Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 17:14, 10 June 2022 (UTC)
 * always grateful for all your help and expertise. Very much appreciated. Thank you! Pseud 14 (talk) 17:30, 10 June 2022 (UTC)

Inappropriate images
Can someone please remove the pictures of literal sh*t posted by a guy called "scatman". And also ban the user? This is today's featured article so millions of people are seeing this????? 78.18.215.167 (talk) 13:12, 8 April 2023 (UTC)