Talk:Rachel McAdams/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:26, 22 June 2011 (UTC)


 * I'll probably start this one in the next few days.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:26, 22 June 2011 (UTC)

done
 * General
 * Resolve the dablink checker results. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:00, 25 June 2011 (UTC)

re-worded the latter. However, I could not find the "had her eyes set" in the earlier part on the article. Could you point out what section it is in?
 * WP:LEAD
 * "had her eyes set", "on the Hollywood radar" sound unencyclopedic and colloquial
 * It was in the 2nd sentence of this version. It has been corrected.

done clarified
 * Link York U here not later in the text.
 * take a break when --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:00, 25 June 2011 (UTC)

done fixed Crystal Clear x3 06:20, 26 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Early life
 * She won a skating award at age 19.
 * Then the text later talks about "An interest in acting sparked when she was child". Please try to be chronological. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:05, 25 June 2011 (UTC)
 * students's council is ungrammatical and should probably be linked. One s in "s's" needs to go. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:09, 25 June 2011 (UTC)

fixed
 * Early 2000s
 * scoring is an unencyclopedic verb choice in this use. Same with "take down"

done
 * Mention what country and network Slings and Arrows is for since we just talked about her transitioning to her first US film

done
 * Should probably mention Mean Girls is an American film subsequently to keep the reader on board. --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:20, 28 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Done
 * Ungrammatical: Originally, a then 26 year-old McAdams

fixed
 * Almost no facts require more than three sources for verification ([20][21][22][23]). Either work in more detail from the sources to make their relevance clear or trim this down.

fixed
 * In paragraph 2, you start talking about The Notebook without naming it. It may even deserve its own paragraph, but I can't tell when you stop talking about Mean Girls.

done
 * viewer-voted sounds wrong. People's choice probably sounds better.

clarified
 * "remaining her top domestic grossing film at over $209.5 million" needs to be rephrased. It sounds like it was her top hit before she was in it and remained so afterwards.
 * "and is her top domestic " should probably have an asof in it.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:25, 28 June 2011 (UTC)

--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:29, 27 June 2011 (UTC) done
 * Done
 * 2006–present
 * 287,000 needs units.

done
 * link New York Post

done
 * Elaborate on clash

fixed --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:37, 27 June 2011 (UTC) done done
 * Ungrammatical: McAdams found this role to be a departure from previous parts[50] enjoyed doing her own stunts as it is the closest thing she has to playing sports.
 * Doing her own stunts should remain in some form.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:35, 28 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Done
 * In the media
 * link Entertainment Weekly
 * Comma before respectively --TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:41, 27 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Did I miss this?

clarified
 * Personal life
 * Do we know what type of Green Card she has?
 * I don't know much about this subject, but I thought there were all kinds of classes of Green Cards. Do you have any more information.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 12:37, 28 June 2011 (UTC)
 * I think it's better if I just remove it. Crystal Clear x3 21:00, 28 June 2011 (UTC)
 * We should WP:PRESERVE the content, but I was just asking. I am probably making a big deal out of the different categories. There is really one kind of card and recipients might be in any of a number of categories. It would be interesting to know which specific category she is in, but it is not necessary. Keep it even if we have no further detail.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:39, 29 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. Have I also correctly addressed the other two issues above (her top domestic film and doing her own stunts in Sherlock)? Crystal Clear x3 11:53, 29 June 2011 (UTC)

fixed done
 * The phrase "cable connection" sounds foreign to me.
 * I'd consider linking environmental awareness, vegetarian and Kensington Market (if it has one).

--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:46, 27 June 2011 (UTC)

GA checklist

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Probably a GA already. I just need to make a final runthrough and check the images
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * By being so early in her career, this article seems less broad than GAs of other actress, but I think it is fairly complete.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * I have to do an image review
 * All images need tags.
 * The first two WP:CAPTIONs need to be adjusted. If they are not complete sentences, they should not end in a period.
 * Done
 * I have to do an image review
 * All images need tags.
 * The first two WP:CAPTIONs need to be adjusted. If they are not complete sentences, they should not end in a period.
 * Done


 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Good job. I am pleased to pass this now.