Talk:Radioactive Man (The Simpsons episode)/GA1

GA Review
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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Comments
Looks pretty good.
 * First, me and my friends used to use the quote "Ze goggles, zey do nothing!" all the time. You might want to include some info on that.ref  Maybe "Graham Beckwith of The Lantern singled out "ze goggles, zey do nothing!" as one of The Simpsons great one liners.  Up to you.  It's a misquote, though.  The real one is "My eyes! The goggles do nothing!"
 * Yeah, I tried to find a good ref for that but I couldn't find any. It has been added now!
 * "part of the hero's sidekick, Fallout Boy, goes to not him, but to Milhouse." should be "not to him"
 * Done!
 * "ditches" is not formal enough.
 * Done!
 * "Radioactive Man" was the first episode to be digitally colored." is choppy where it is. Not sure how to fix that.
 * I actually think it's good where it is.
 * "Bart leaves and acquires high shoes and a vertical stripe suit, but by this point Milhouse has already taken the part, albeit reluctantly." the stuff about his shoes and shirt is a bit trivial. Probably added by IPs, I know.
 * Done!
 * "Bart eagerly accepts this new role." did he do it eagerly, I can't remember? Just doesn't sound like Bart.  If he did, that's fine.
 * He did.
 * Otherwise, good "Plot" section.
 * OK.
 * The "Production" section is good to go.
 * OK.
 * "The Radioactive Man film series, the 1970's films in particular" kind of comes out of the blue, since the plot doesn't mention it. Provide a little background.
 * Better?
 * Who is "Moe"? Provide some background.
 * Done!
 * In general, the "Cultural references" section is choppy and needs some background. For instance "Comic Book Guy sends a message to other Internet nerds about who will star in the new Radioactive Man film, two of whom are the nerds Homer" could be something like "In one scene, Comic Book Guy sends a message to other Internet nerds about who will star in the new Radioactive Man film.  Two of whom are the nerds Homer"
 * Better?
 * 'Krusty tries to prove his "range"' should be 'Krusty tries to prove the "range"'
 * Done!
 * The Nancy Basile quote should be summarized, with only the punchy bits in quotes.
 * Done!
 * Try and make the first paragraph in "Reception" into at least three sentences, or merge it with my next suggestion. Two sentences is too short.
 * Done!
 * Break up the second paragraph in "Reception" into two parts, with some sort of sentence to bridge the two.
 * I think the length of that paragraph is pretty good, so there's no need to break it up IMO.

The article is close. Fix these issues, and I'll pass it. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 00:31, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I think I have addressed most of your concerns. :) The Le ft  orium  10:28, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Looks good. I'll pass it. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 16:25, 21 December 2008 (UTC)