Talk:Radu Lupu/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tim riley (talk · contribs) 20:03, 8 April 2019 (UTC)

Starting first read-through. More soon.  Tim riley  talk   20:03, 8 April 2019 (UTC)

First comments
As is my usual practice, I leave the lead till last, to be sure it summarises the whole article and doesn't contain anything not substantiated in the main text. At a first quick run-through, this article looks in good shape, and unless otherwise noted, my remarks are merely suggestions. That's all for now. More tomorrow. I'm enjoying this excellent article and look forward to resuming my review.  Tim riley  talk   21:37, 8 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Early life and education
 * Source at note 6 doesn't substantiate the first sentence.
 * Yes, I am incredibly confuzzled... after viewing the page's history, this information was actually added more than twelve years ago by . Pinging them to see if they remember the exact source; I thought it was actually in the NY Sun article, but looks like it isn't. My bad. I will also continue to dig through sources to see if any source can substantiate his parents' names and occupations. Zingarese talk  ·  contribs  22:46, 8 April 2019 (UTC)
 * "at the age of 5 ...as a six-year-old "– better to be consistent about words or figures for numbers under ten, perhaps?
 * ✅ 5 → five
 * Early career
 * "In 1965, Lupu was placed fifth ... The following year, Lupu" – perhaps "he" the second time?
 * "First Prize in the Second" – strange outbreak of Capital Letters here and throughout this sentence. I don't think the Manual of Style endorses this.
 * My mistake.
 * "Sergei Prokofiev's Piano Concerto No. 2 (Op. 16)" – as opposed to the Piano Concerto No. 2 that isn't Op 16? Seems a touch gratuitous, verging on showing off, but if you want to keep it in I shan't quibble. Ditto for other opus numbers later.
 * Hm...do you suggest adding key, then?
 * Neither key nor opus number is included in the title of the WP article on Piano Concerto No. 2 (Prokofiev), and I don't think adding either of them here helps the reader one little bit. But if you want one or the other or even both it's your call.  Tim riley  talk   08:47, 11 April 2019 (UTC)
 * "in the Finals" – this oughtn't to be capitalised, surely?
 * "He brought what seemed like a lifetime's experience to its alternating desolation and pride" – your reporting sources are fine, of course, but if you want to cite the original it is Chissell, Joan. "Prize-winner's debut." The Times, 28 November 1969, p. 16, http://tinyurl.galegroup.com/tinyurl/9i3Dw9.
 * Thank you very much for this
 * "In March and April 1970, Lupu made his first recording for Decca Records of Brahms' Rhapsody in B minor" – "Brahms'" rather than "Brahms's" seems rather odd, but to each his own, and as to the sentence, I don't suppose anyone will really misunderstand it, but it doesn’t actually say what you mean it to say, viz that it was Lupu's first recording for Decca of anything, rather than his first of the Brahms Rhapsody. It is also uncited, and doesn't seem to be entirely corroborated by the Decca archive
 * I added that source and made a minor modification to make the meaning more clear (that it's Lupu's debut Decca recording).
 * "By 1981 he had played with every major orchestra "– this is cited but is highly debatable. Every major orchestra? Defined by whom?
 * Here is the quote: "Radu Lupu has played and been re-engaged with every major orchestra, under the baton of the world's leading conductors." This was from an article by Carol Mont Parker in Clavier magazine in 1981.
 * Hmm. A touch of journalistic licence there, I feel, but I don't press the point.  Tim riley  talk   08:41, 11 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Here is the quote: "Radu Lupu has played and been re-engaged with every major orchestra, under the baton of the world's leading conductors." This was from an article by Carol Mont Parker in Clavier magazine in 1981.
 * Hmm. A touch of journalistic licence there, I feel, but I don't press the point.  Tim riley  talk   08:41, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

Concluding comments
All looking good. A few more very minor points: That's my lot. Nothing too earth-shaking there. I look forward to promoting the article once these small points are addressed. –  Tim riley  talk   08:41, 11 April 2019 (UTC)
 * "which was raved by John Rockwell" – is there a word missing here?
 * Is there? I've taken a hard look at this sentence and I'm positive there's no problem.
 * Probably an Engvar thing. In BrE you'd need "about" after raved. If you're happy with the present version, fine.  Tim riley  talk   07:10, 20 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Rockwell block quote: See MOS:PMC – I'd silently correct the typo, as recommended in the Manual of Style, rather than using the "sic".
 * "In 1975, Lupu debuted with the Royal Concertgebouw Orchestra" – just the plain Concertgebouw Orchestra at the time.
 * "Lupu was awarded the "Abbiati" prize ... Edison Award ... Grammy Award" – Inconsistent treatment of quotation marks and capitalisation for the prizes/awards.
 * The last two sentences of the Remainder of the 20th century section are uncited (and even if one takes the "Grammy" awards as seriously as they are taken in their native US, it seems a bit odd to mention one that Lupu failed to win.)
 * 21st century – It is not a requirement for GA that an article should be comprehensive, but it does seem odd that Lupu's only biographical details for the past two decades are limited to an Italian prize and a British gong.
 * When I take this article to FA this section will definitely undergo some expanding!
 * Musical style
 * Spelling: in the second para the spelling switches from AmE to BrE "favourite" (and I don’t imagine it was obvious on the radio that Uchida was speaking in BrE spelling when she mentioned "colour").
 * A spot of parenthetic OR: I can vouch for Stephen Hough's being an admirer: I sat in the row behind him at the Barbican in 2003 when Lupu played the Schumann (very slowly) after which Hough and companion left, missing a blazing Sibelius 5 from Colin Davis and the LSO. But I digress.
 * Thank you for sharing! Well, the tempi in his classic recording of this concerto with LSO and Previn are quite normal (even a little fast for me at times), but that performance dates way back to 1973. I was in the audience when Lupu performed with the Chicago Symphony and Muti, playing Beethoven 5; despite almost losing his way in the third movement, he played with such conviction, beauty of sound, and incandescence. (Some dot-connecting to this anecdote: I also listened to the same concerto live three months prior by the NY Phil and Gilbert; the soloist was Stephen Hough )
 * Personal life
 * It seems strange to give the year of the first, but not of the second marriage.
 * It is not established in any source the exact time the marriage between Lupu and Bugarin began. However, a 1992 interview in clavier magazine states that it was a "recent" marriage, so I put circa 1992 in the infobox.
 * References: Some tidying needed:
 * 3 – Gramophone should be italicised. Also at ref 47.
 * 4 – and all subsequent cases: all the headlines in capital letters should be changed to title or sentence case: see MOS:ALLCAPS
 * 9 and 10 – The "via" is unexpected, and is inconsistent with the style of the other references
 * 15. Should have either a URL, or a page number if you're quoting a paper copy.
 * 17. Ditto. (And likewise for refs 28, 29 and 36)
 * 18. Looks very odd, but I can't open the link (not available in the EU as it doesn't comply with data protection law). I find it hard to believe in the existence of a writer named "Register, Scott Duncan, Orange County". Same for ref 44.
 * 26. You might perhaps remove "Buy from ArchivMusic" from the link
 * 45. The linked page does not substantiate the statement. I think you need the Cite episode template and an approximate timing. Ditto for ref 57.
 * 52. Decidedly inadequate citation. But I have checked the ODNB and the statement is there all right. These are the details of the citation: Wade-Gery, Robert, and Sarah Wilkinson. "Wilson, Sir (Archibald) Duncan (1911–1983), diplomatist." Oxford Dictionary of National Biography. January 03, 2008. Oxford University Press,. Date of access 11 Apr. 2019, http://www.oxforddnb.com/view/10.1093/ref:odnb/9780198614128.001.0001/odnb-978019861412 8-e-64933
 * I see progress being made on the article page. Looking good. I'll leave it a couple of days and revisit the review.  Tim riley  talk   13:02, 15 April 2019 (UTC)
 * , are we making progress on the above? I'm in no rush, but if more time is needed I can put the review on formal hold if you wish.  Tim riley  talk   20:37, 19 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Yes! I just needed to find where I had buried the offline resources (for the page numbers) but just found them. I should finish addressing all of the above points very soon. Zingarese talk  ·  contribs  20:54, 19 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Excellent. I'll happily await developments.  Tim riley  talk   20:55, 19 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Dear, Other than the points I've written a response to, I believe I have addressed everything. Thank you so much again for your excellent review. Zingarese talk  ·  contribs  02:14, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

Overall summary
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

It has been a pleasure to review this article, which in my view meets the GA criteria in every regard. I am very pleased to see from the exchanges above that you are thinking in terms of FA in due course. I'd strongly advise taking the article to peer review first, which in my experience makes the nominator's life much more comfortable at FAC. I hope you will ping me at PR/FAC stage. Meanwhile, congratulations on getting the article to GA. –  Tim riley  talk   07:10, 20 April 2019 (UTC)