Talk:Raging Bully/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk) 00:30, 19 January 2010 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * I believe DVD Verdict stands as quite a reliable DVD review website; each review is clearly well-researched and neutral (well, by a critic's standard that is)  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:


 * mall is a dablink
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Could we have the names of the minor characters linking to a character list, if one exists? If not, then it's fine how it is, context is provided.
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * "laugh at him" At Buford, or Phineas?
 * ✅ (Buford)  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * "Buford accepts and Holyfield helps Phineas train for the match, despite warnings from Phineas' friends Baljeet and Isabella, through simple tasks, like punching a chain of sausages, climbing up a down escalator, or playing Dance Dance Revolution." That sentence could do with rewriting.
 * ✅ (I think)  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * If something belongs to Phineas, it is Phineas's, not Phineas'- the only exception is Jesus (and yeah, I accept that that's a pretty ridiculous rule). Possibly different in American English, but I don't think so.
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * "secretly a secret agent" Redundant word is redundant. Perhaps "who is, unbeknownst to Phineas, a secret agent"
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * "Phineas' is" No need for an apostrophe here
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * "who take over" Who took over?
 * ✅ (I changed it to "manages, is that okay?)  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * "himself, who appears" change to "himself, appearing"
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * "match with Buford" Against Buford
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Even if the other episodes do not have articles, they should be linked- redlinks are not necessarily a bad thing. Alternatively, they could be turned into redirects to the episode list page if you really don't want redlinks. This includes the infobox episodes.
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * "Ed Liu, of Toon Zone, wrote that the episode and others included on the DVD The Fast and the Phineas were way too manic for their own good, never giving a gag enough time to develop a proper laugh before ripping off to the next one,"" Quote marks don't open, they just close
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * "the "He's a Bully" montage" I'm assuming that's the training montage, but could you specify that?
 * ✅  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)


 * The formatting on ref one is a little odd- only the DVD name should be in italics.
 * The template actually automatically does that.  The Flash  {talk} 03:00, 20 January 2010 (UTC)

This article is a lot better than I expected it to be- very well considered, written and researched. I would be more than happy to promote once the small issues above are resolved. Feel free to drop a note on my talk page when you make the changes, though I will be watching this page. J Milburn (talk) 00:30, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! :)  The Flash  {talk} 02:53, 20 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Fixed one dablink, and I'm now happy to promote. Nice work! J Milburn (talk) 17:36, 20 January 2010 (UTC)