Talk:Ralph Milne/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:41, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi! Glad to review another nomination of yours. Will get to this shortly. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 07:41, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * We generally don't include citations in the lead. They go into the main text. All the facts of the lead should be present in the main text.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  In total he made 285 appearances "He made a total of 285 appearances"?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 * a full senior cap Can this be wikilinked?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 * when writing his own autobiography If McLean writes an autobiography it can only be his own. So "own" is redundant.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Club career

 * Start the main text with the person's full name
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 * superior academic progress "superior" could be better reworded as "remarkable".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "Striker" could be linked
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Dundee United

 * This section is very long. Please divide this into subsections
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Link Dundee United, equaliser, matchday squad, hamstring
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Aged 18 he scored his first goal --> He scored his first goal at the age of 18
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 * in the UEFA Cup. Add the citation at the end
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Charlton Athletic

 * "Charlton Athletic" is a duplicate link
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Bristol City

 * The 1987–88 link is a duplink
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Manchester United

 * Duplinks: First Division, Nottingham Forest, Old Trafford
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Milne remained on United's payroll until 30 June 1991, when he was released. Source?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

International career

 * Milne made his debut  Would be good to put his age explicitly here.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Style of play

 * Another former Dundee United teammate, Davie Dodds You should have mentioned that Hegarty was a former Dundee United teammate, and used "another teammate" for Dodds.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Personal life

 * Can we have the full names and possibly some idea about the background of his wives?
 * No background information exists for his wives I don't think, but I added a sentence for his last long term girlfriend. His two sons issued a notice of thanks to Dundee United following Milne's death, but I imagine his former wives might not want to be described in his Wikipedia article anyway, with him being such a difficult partner and all.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Duplink: Jim McLean
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
 * He died Say "Milne died", lest "he" be confused with McLean
 * Done.--EchetusXe 15:12, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

That should be all. Good luck! Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 09:37, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Update: A bit busy now, I think I will be able to get to this only by the end of this week. Cheers! Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 18:42, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
 * OK, thanks for the suggestions.--EchetusXe 15:13, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Thank you. I notice no more issues in the article. Glad to promote this. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 15:51, 28 March 2016 (UTC)