Talk:Ralph Townsend/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:08, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Are you still going to review this, ? It's been over 2 weeks..... Snuggums (talk / edits) 04:26, 28 July 2015 (UTC)

Comments very interesting, and well written. I enjoyed the article immensely, it's certainly very close to good article quality, so I'll place it on hold for a while to see if we can address some of the comments. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:38, 28 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Avoid single-sentence paragraphs, like the opening para and last para in the lead, and the penultimate para in the "Advocate of non-interventionism" section and the last para of the Arrest section and last para of the Post-war section.✅
 * You have a single citation in the lead, which is a little odd. Presumably the information is expanded upon and referenced in the main body and as it's not a quotation, I would remove the lead cite.✅
 * It's a personal thing, but try to avoid pipelinking to a redirect as you have done for " propaganda organization funded by the Japanese government" which you've piped to "Jikyoku Iinkai" which redirects to "Japanese Committee on Trade and Information".✅
 * Notable work in the infobox should be in italics. Same comment for "communist takeover of China".✅
 * "insatiable greed" this is bordering on not being entirely encyclopedic since you're not directly quoting him here.✅
 * I generally look for why I should pay attention to a particular commentator's opinion, like "Owen Lattimore ", you could introduce him as a scholar of China and Central Asia for instance.✅
 * "doing advertising work " never keen on "doing".✅
 * Again, "who seek to crush Japan as a bulwark of capitalism in Asia" this is in need of a quote or it needs to be toned down.✅
 * Times of India is The Times of India.✅
 * "1937–1941" year ranges like this usually don't repeat the century so 1937–41.✅
 * "Then on 28 January" not sure you need the "Then..."✅
 * No need to pipelink Japanese Committee on Trade and Information to redirect back to itself.✅
 * Nye image caption is a complete sentence so needs a period.✅
 * "US government" vs "U.S. entry" - be consistent.✅
 * the Washington Post should be The Washington Post.✅
 * Remove the See also links that are already linked in the article.✅
 * Where are all the works referenced? As pretty much none of them have articles or ISBNs, how can I verify them?✅
 * Are all those external links really required?✅


 * Thank you for your review. Is there anything else I can do to improve the article?CurtisNaito (talk) 18:08, 29 July 2015 (UTC)
 * sorry it's taken so long to get back to you, I'm satisified with your edits, so I'll pass to GA. Good work. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:55, 13 August 2015 (UTC)