Talk:Randy Ambrosie/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 10:04, 12 November 2017 (UTC)

It's me again! Taking on this review. MWright96 (talk) 15:22, 12 November 2017 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Infobox

 * Multiple facts in the infobox are unsourced, like the DOB, POB, height, and weight
 * I think these come from the The Canadian Pro Football Encyclopedia, WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 21:44, 16 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Yes, the entire infobox in all of my Canadian football biographies are sourced to the CPFE. ~ Rob 13 Talk 22:06, 16 November 2017 (UTC)

Early career

 * "In 1984, he was named an All-Canadian." - maybe you could explain what an All-Canadian is to non-football experts like myself ✅
 * "By February 1985, he was considered likely to be selected in the first round of the 1985 CFL Draft." - if there anything to say whom Ambrosie was likely to be selected for the first round of the 85 draft? ✅

Calgary Stampeders

 * Wikilink Calgary Stampeders since it is the first time it is mentioned in the main body of the prose ✅
 * I'm guessing that rookie of the year is the CFL's Most Outstanding Rookie Award? If so please added a wikilink ✅

Toronto Argonauts

 * Added a wikilink to Toronto Argonauts and right guard ✅
 * "The continued injury issues didn't affect the offensive line's success on the field," - no contractions please ✅

Edmonton Eskimos

 * "The Argonauts had not originally planned to trade Ambrosie, but Ambrosie requested to be traded to a team closer to where his wife worked." - reptition of Ambrosie ✅
 * "The Eskimos met the Stampeders in the West Final for the fourth season in the row" - reword to The Eskimos met the Stapeders in the West Final for the fourth consecutive season ✅

Adminstrative roles

 * "On June 29, 2017, Ambrosie was named to be the 14th CFL commissioner, succeeding Jeffrey Orridge." - should be reworded toOn June 29, 2017 Ambrosie was name the 14th CFL commissioner, succeeding Jeffrey Orridge. ✅
 * "The move was made official on July 4." - perhaphs this could be reworded to say The move was made offical five days later. ✅
 * I slightly changed this section of the article. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:10, 16 November 2017 (UTC)
 * The change looks fine and thanks for correcting a factual error that I overlooked. MWright96 (talk) 11:14, 17 November 2017 (UTC)