Talk:Ranger Suárez/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 14:22, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 14:22, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * I think the drug suspension should be mentioned in the lead. Maybe end the first sentence after 2012, then make it part of the sentence about the Venezuelan Summer League.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”2019 season, but was” – No comma needed.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Early life

 * ”outfield, but” – No comma needed.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Minor leagues

 * No comma needed after 2012 in the first sentence.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”In five innings pitched, Suárez pitched” – “In five innings pitched, Suarez recorded”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I think when “By” is used, the verb should be “had been” instead of “was.”
 * —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”a 0.65 ERA, with 20” – No comma needed.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Might be a day missing from the NYPL Player of the Week—26-31 is only six days.
 * whoops, dyscalculia! —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”the season, as decided” – No comma needed.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I seem to remember from back when I studied German that “Rindfleisch” is beef (Don’t put that in the article!)
 * ”Suárez was named to the South Atlantic League All-Star team, but could not participate in the game, and was replaced by Jordan Jess.[12] On July 4, Suárez was promoted to the Class A-Advanced Clearwater Threshers, joining a rotation of top pitching prospects that also included JoJo Romero, Sixto Sanchez, and Franklyn Kilome” – “Suárez was named to the South Atlantic League All-Star team, but Jordan Jess replaced him on the roster. This was because before the game, on July 4, Suárez was promoted to the Class A-Advanced Clearwater Threshers.  He joined a rotation of top pitching prospects that also included JoJo Romero, Sixto Sanchez, and Franklyn Kilome.”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”Fightin Phils, as part” – No comma needed.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Philadelphia Phillies

 * Put who ranked him the #10 prospect; Baseball America and MiLB.com don’t always have the same order.
 * —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ” He played in 37 games for the Phillies in 2019, all in relief, and with eight closing appearances” – “He made 37 relief appearances for the Phillies in 2019, finishing eight games for them.” Then take out “There” at the start of the next sentence.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”late August, and was” – “late August before being”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”I’d take out the part about Lidge—not really notable for someone who only has four saves.”
 * ✅ And added that he moved into the rotation after we acquired Kennedy —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Pitcher profile

 * Change the first two sentences to “Suárez spent most of his professional baseball career as a starting pitcher before being used as a long reliever and closer by the Phillies in 2021.”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ” Suárez is also known for his fastball, which averages” – “Suárez’s fastball averages”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I’d take out the sentence about depth, since it’s a little too early in his career to tell.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Personal life

 * ”first player in MLB” – “first MLB player”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”While playing in” – “While he was playing in”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Looks good; just minor stuff. Let me know when you’re finished, and I’ll give it another look! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 14:44, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * All done! You're really making up for the Austin Nola thing, aren'tcha? ;) —  Ghost River  21:40, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Passed. Nice job, again! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:08, 14 September 2021 (UTC)