Talk:Rati/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 04:47, 8 October 2010 (UTC)

I'll review this tomorrow. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:47, 8 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks. FYI, I have requested a copyedit from GOCE for any prose issues. -- Redtigerxyz Talk 15:48, 8 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Not a problem. Since a few others were failed, I'll hold off a review until the copyedit takes place, so long as it's relatively soon. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 15:54, 9 October 2010 (UTC)
 * User:SMasters has graciously copyedited the article. -- Redtigerxyz Talk 15:30, 10 October 2010 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:
 * "she is often depicted with him in legend and temple sculpture." Do you mean scripture, or are they actually in sculptures together?
 * "Rati and Kama are often pictured on temple walls as "welcome sculptures", symbols of good fortune and prosperity" -- Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)


 * "but Shiva had turned to ascetic ways after death" after the death
 * Done.-- Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)


 * "Kama goes to Mount Kailash with Rati and Madhu or Vasanta ("Spring"), and shoots his love-arrows at Shiva, or enters his mind and invokes desire." sentence should be in past tense.
 * Done. -- Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)


 * "and shoots his love-arrows at Shiva, or enters his mind and invokes desire." the addition of the second part is a little confusing. If it's an either-or thing based on sources make that clearer.
 * Done. -- Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)


 * "it is Shiva, who blesses Rati with the boon of Kama's resurrection" that comma isn't needed.
 * Done. -- Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)


 * "Here, after the burning of Kama, Parvati thought how she could achieve Shiva now." A bit confused as to what this sentence means.
 * Done. -- Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)


 * "Scholar Benton relates her birth" full name on first mention.
 * Done. -- Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)

I'll put this on hold and give you a week to fix the issues. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 21:18, 10 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the GA review. I hope all issues are addressed. -- Redtigerxyz Talk 17:19, 11 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 02:24, 12 October 2010 (UTC)