Talk:Ravenholm/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:35, 31 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

Infobox and lede

 * Infobox caption is redundant with both "seen from above" and "looking out over the town"


 * "6th chapter" "sixth chapter" per MOS:NUMERAL


 * ""We Don't Go to Ravenholm."" ""We Don't Go to Ravenholm"." per MOS:LQ


 * Taking place in an Eastern European mining town that was destroyed by the bombardment of ravenous alien headcrabs. Sentence fragment
 * ✅ - That error was added by a subsequent editor, but I rephrased the lede so it is hopefully more clear.

Level content

 * Very pedantic: the fact that this is the sixth chapter of Half-Life 2 needs to be mentioned in this section


 * "infamous line" comes across as POV
 * ✅ - Scare quotes added


 * the music shifts to horror More specificity is needed here; the score for Halloween is not the same as for Scream etc.


 * "poison headcrabs" "poisonous headcrabs"


 * The shift from lowercase/scare quoted "fast zombies" to capitalized Fast Zombies seems inconsistent


 * "some zombies" "several zombies"

Plot

 * The Resistance should be linked in the "Level content" section and there should be a consistent capitalization of "The"
 * ✅ (Actually just unlinked, because the link went nowhere)


 * Ravenholm was a small mining town that consisted mostly of shabby wooden houses Very close paraphrasing with source


 * While use of such weapons was relatively rare elsewhere in the game's world, it is possible that the Combine saw it as retribution for resisting them for so long. I'm not sure what this means

Development

 * Check the wikilink on "trap", which currently links to our article on animal trapping


 * Understanding the suggestion to use physics objects as weapons relied on shared knowledge of zombie-based horror instilled by fiction such as The Zombie Survival Guide. Another confusing sentence


 * "It is a popular consensus" "It is generally believed by fans and writers"

Cancelled projects

 * "It was eventually cancelled" "This project was eventually cancelled"


 * " Marc Laidlaw"

Reception

 * Paragraphs should have topic sentences to explain why they're broken up the way that they are

General comments

 * Two relevant fair use images
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Apart from one sentence noted above, Earwig copyvio score looks good

Thank you for your patience as I have been dealing with several health issues both physical and mental. Putting on hold now. —  Ghost River  17:58, 18 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Okay, the required changes have been done. Thank you for the review! ᴢxᴄᴠʙɴᴍ (ᴛ) 23:41, 18 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you for making those changes, happy to pass! —  Ghost River  16:41, 25 February 2022 (UTC)