Talk:Raymond Berry/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kaiser matias (talk · contribs) 03:45, 24 September 2017 (UTC)

Some comments:

✅ ✅ ✅ Agreed, I'm not sure how I didn't notice that. Perhaps I meant to move it at some point and forgot to. ✅ ✅ Couldn't find a source for this, so removed.
 * "To recognize his contributions as a player, Berry was inducted into the Pro Football Hall of Fame in 1973." Sounds odd to read, and think it would be better as "In recognition of his playing career," or something like that.
 * "Berry, who did not miss a single game until his eighth year in the league, led the NFL in receptions and receiving yards three times and in receiving touchdowns twice, while Unitas won four NFL Most Valuable Player awards and set numerous passing records." Should have a citation for that.
 * The second paragraph in the professional playing career section, which starts with "Berry was famous for his attention to detail and preparation...", would it be better to move it to the profile section, perhaps in its own subsection? It seems more appropriate for that area, as it goes over some important details on what made Berry a good player, but isn't so much about his playing career.
 * "The Colts finished atop the Western Division with a record of 9–3, and faced the New York Giants in the NFL Championship Game." Citation
 * "His regular season coaching record was 48–39 (.552) and he was 3–2 (.600) in the playoffs." Citation
 * "...and Berry retired from coaching." Citation

Not a lot really, just a couple citations to add. Otherwise looks good. Kaiser matias (talk) 03:45, 24 September 2017 (UTC)
 * Sorry, I've been away from Wikipedia for a while for reasons. I'll try to get to this ASAP. Lizard  (talk) 14:37, 5 October 2017 (UTC)
 * OK I believe that's everything. Lizard  (talk) 12:53, 6 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Looks good to me. Well done. Kaiser matias (talk) 09:22, 10 October 2017 (UTC)