Talk:Raymond Howard (Wiccan)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:47, 24 August 2016 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 18:47, 24 August 2016 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
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Biography

 * "This was up the road from Dumbledene," - up the road sounds informal
 * Changed to "located near to". Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:13, 25 August 2016 (UTC)


 * "and they had placed an advert" - advertisement
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:13, 25 August 2016 (UTC)

The Coven of Atho

 * "and taught "Eight Paths of Magick", which was similar to the Eightfold Path taught in Gardnerian Wicca." - reptition of "taught"
 * Changed first "taught" to "promulgated". Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:11, 25 August 2016 (UTC)


 * "the racer Donald Campbell" - clarify what sort of racer Campbell was
 * Replaced with "race car driver". Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:11, 25 August 2016 (UTC)


 * remove the hyphen from cash-box
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:11, 25 August 2016 (UTC)