Talk:Raymond III, Count of Tripoli

Copyedit
, thank you for your comprehensive copyedit. I am really grateful for your hard work. Now I can make a GAN. Have a nice week. Borsoka (talk) 01:01, 11 October 2019 (UTC)

Referents
Hi Borsoka, what didn't you like about these changes? Cheers, – SJ + 01:43, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
 * "Her husband's jealousy gave rise"": the leading pronoun is ambiguous, easier to name him.
 * "When appointing Hodierna to the regency for her son," is a bit confusing as it's the first time the appointment is mentioned. Clearer to satate that the appointment happened, then clarify that it was at odds with his wishes.
 * BTW, I love this series of articles and am learning a lot from them; no strong feelings about these copyedits, just trying to improve the clarity and flow. – SJ + 01:44, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Agree, clarity could be improved, but I think MoS should also be taken into account. For instance, "however" is a word to avoid. Borsoka (talk) 04:15, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Aha! I see :)  – SJ +  15:57, 14 October 2023 (UTC)