Talk:Raymond Pace Alexander/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: MX (talk · contribs) 23:13, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Review
Will review this article. It looks ripe for promotion already, but I'll try to be as thorough as possible. Stay tuned. MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 23:14, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Overall, this article is excellently written. I enjoyed it a lot. Below are a few issues / suggestions before passing this nomination. Thank you! MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 03:05, 14 October 2018 (UTC)

Early life and education

 * – Is the "Met" an official acronym of the Metropolitan Opera House? If not, I would suggest adding a after  Metropolitan Opera House and using the shorter version later.


 * – Link both schools


 * – I think this would work without parenthesis.

Legal career

 * – I would link Republican for those non-American readers unfamiliar with the word.


 * – Just a suggestion, but how do you feel about linking sentenced to death with "Capital punishment in Pennsylvania"?


 * – Add (NBA) after National Bar Association since it is used later.


 * – Misspelled; should be "Through".

Berwyn desegregation case
– using "now" twice sounds a bit awkward. Consider rephrasing.

Growing prestige

 * – I would stick with the acronym NBA, per above.


 * – link fair trial

Trenton Six

 * – link Trenton police


 * – Which community party? Can we link it too?


 * – link to Supreme Court of New Jersey


 * – Add (CRC) after the Civil Rights Congress mention in the previous sentences


 * – Not sure what CLC is since this acronym was not mentioned earlier.

Seeking judicial nomination

 * – Unlink Republican here since you will be linking it above, per WP:OVERLINK


 * – Shouldn't it be "Mossell", as used in earlier paragraphs?


 * – If it hasn't been linked before, please link the article: President's Committee on Civil Rights


 * – tidy it up to "the school eventually desegregated"

City Council

 * – I think the right way to say it is "He won the reelection ..."


 * – While where? It's a bit unclear.


 * – Feel free to put 2⁄3 if you'd like

Judge

 * – What is "City Hall"? Is that another way of saying local / city government?


 * – link black separatism; could be an interesting read

Infobox

 * Have you considered adding one? I think it would be a value-added for our readers.


 * Thank you for the thorough review. My changes are here, and should address your concerns. The only one I left out, I think, was referring to Sadie Alexander as "Mossell" after her marriage. I think that since she changed her name, we should reintroduce her that way. Everything else, I think, is as you've suggested. --Coemgenus (talk) 21:22, 14 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Thank you. This article passes. Congratulations! MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 22:45, 14 October 2018 (UTC)