Talk:Rebeca Delgado/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Iamawesomeautomatic (talk · contribs) 17:05, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Hello, here is my review of your article.

Lead
Overall: Pass

Early life
Overall: Pass

Constituent Assembly and Government Official
Decided to combine the two sections when reviewing due to the length.

Overall: Pass

Chamber of Deputies
Overall: Pass

Later career and retirement
Overall: Pass

Electoral history
Overall: Pass

Overall
I am putting this on hold. The only problems are minor prose issues which should be easy to fix, and one neutrality issue. Once addressed, it will be listed as a good article. Iamawesomeautomatic (talk) 17:05, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * All but two queries answered. Two clarifications: For "re-elect" vs "reelect", my understanding is that they're interchangeable, in which case I would be inclined to keep "reelect" for consistency between other created articles. I'd, of course, be obliged to change it anyway if you insist or if one is preferred in the Manual of Style. Second (Lead, Query #3), how would you suggest including the full title? At present, it would become "Delgado was elected to... the Chamber of Deputies, reaching the presidency of the [Chamber of Deputies] in 2012.", which seems a bit repetitive. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 20:30, 3 October 2022 (UTC)
 * 1.) I'll take your word on "re-elect" vs "reelect" because I still can't find information about it on Wikipedia's Manual of Style. It seems like they accept both, so continue to use "reelect" as you were initially doing! My apologies.
 * 2.) Initially, this was my solution:
 * "In 2009, Delgado was elected to represent Cochabamba in the Chamber of Deputies, and elected president of the Chamber in 2012."
 * But the more I read it, the more I realized that your original sentence was the better option. However, just for consistency, I think you should indicate how she reached the presidency. Your previous sentence tells us that she was elected to the Chamber of Deputies, but just says she reached the presidency without specification.
 * Maybe some solutions:
 * "In 2009, Delgado was elected to represent Cochabamba in the Chamber of Deputies, and elected president of the lower chamber in 2012."
 * "In 2009, Delgado was elected to represent Cochabamba in the Chamber of Deputies, and elected to the presidency of the lower chamber in 2012."
 * Tell me what you think. Thanks. Iamawesomeautomatic (talk) 21:59, 3 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Went with option two. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 23:43, 3 October 2022 (UTC)
 * My last comment is about the third paragraph from the President of the Chamber of Deputies subsection of the article. "The government nonetheless demanded that the legislature pass the norm without modifications." I assume norm is the English translation of norma? Given the surrounding context I would use the word "bill" instead. Iamawesomeautomatic (talk) 01:14, 4 October 2022 (UTC)
 * That's fine. Changed to just "pass it" as the word bill is already present earlier in the sentence. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 01:28, 4 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good. I'll pass the article. Iamawesomeautomatic (talk) 01:56, 4 October 2022 (UTC)